Her missing footsteps follow me
rattle silent in my mind
in streets of arm in arm no more
cobbled pavings cry her name
willow fingers reach, ....in disbelief
i walk my heart along our lanes
where hinges sang to know her then
silence, ....shares my pain
what worth can now tomorrow bring
where will sunlight find to light
bring on the clouds and falling rain
to mourn the long goodnight
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Beautiful emotive words d a.
I am sure that sunlight will fill your life.
Andy
I'm looking forwaqrd to getting out into the sunshine.
hauntingly beautiful ... and so bloomin sad .................
It was a tear jerker to write.... had to be really.
Felt that and it hurts.
Left me a bit raw.
Dave
Sorry about that DD. I try hard to get right into the feelings of these subjects. Such sad times as described will be felt by all who know true sadness.
emotive writing, I like your use of everyday metaphors, it grounds the realness and expands the scope of relatability in your write, at least for me
great read, especially that first stanza: gripping
Thank you LBM.
Good write dusk
Erm, how long is that night? (Note to self: Do shut up Orchi. lol).
It's a long one.
Yes - the nights are getting longer now. They must mean 'getting darker now' as each day is still 24 hours, and no more.
Do you then that nights are lighter at certain times of year?
Yes! A line from a comedy show: 'The night was dark - they usually are'!
Had to read this over again before I could not find words to describe the sorrow that lingers around every line -
- -- a heart-wrenching helping of known preciousness so mournfully missed - - - and so beautifully expressed my friend.
I think that to write convincingly about such things one has to get into the appropriate frame of mind. I know i did here, it was a tearful write. Thank you for your kind comments.
I loved this poem. So emotive
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