somewhere to the south a dog barked
the moment froze
intense listening, sensing
woodland wet silence filled the night
mist of exhaled breath
caught in strains of moonlight
then onward in careful silence
no stranger detected here
would pass with their life
was this life chosen
or another wave of pain
from the shoulder wound
something fell hard behind him
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dusk arising (
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- Comment from author about the poem: Just setting a scene for you to play with
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ouch... sometimes it pays to keep shtum ............................................
Keep yer head down and let bad news pass by....... i'm not sure whether this post worked or not.
Got me start with the bark then had to read it a few times as each time was different!
Great setting..
I'm pleased you played around with this piece.
Oooh - - what a scene these words portray -- loved the scary feel of this read D.A.
I wasn't sure that its scarey nature was going to come across. Thank you for your reassurance here.
Strange how some of us are in the same mood.
rider approaches
while alert to recognize
the unexpected
There are many a strange mood to adjust to each day here on MPS dont you think? Sometimes I can't flex my mind enough.
Is this (dare I ask?) from experience?
Only having been part of night manoeuvres in a mock battle as a voluntary army cadet during my youth, it felt very real. Good stuff.
BTW the whole thing (orders, square bashing etc ) convinced me, as with sunday school and religion, to stay clear.
Dave
No this was just an imaginary scene with no ending. I wanted to see where it took each reader to and if they developed it at all. Not sure that it worked too well to be honest.
Did for me
Very intriguing write d a giving me much to think about.
Andy
Thanks Goldfinch, that's just the reaction i wanted.
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