It was windy that day on the beach,
dunes offering little real cover.
Sand in sandwiches as bad as ever
but sea and sun was fun like always.
A long planned day out for us all.
A picture of your six year old smile,
shivvering white flesh in speedos.
Maybe you wondered if mum and dad
had decided to get back together again.
We hadn't but it was fun to be that same
family unit again after the estrangement.
Hopefully you've remembered that time and
learned that what once was many a good thing
shared, does not lose all its meaningfulness
nor it's happy memories and worth,
when it is over.
You know your mum and me are still
good respectful friends and would do
anything for the other
should a need arise.
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Good words Dusk. Very discriptive.
Thanks Jerry, I remember the day well.
A fine write Dusk.
And a fine comment from you Orchidee too.
A model every disengaged/separated couple should attempt to follow. Unfortunately....
Ouch at unfortunately Dave. I'm probably misunderstanding you.
I’m hesitant to enter into any kind of debate at MPS right now. However… since it’s you. 🙂
In Oz, and I don’t believe the situation would be different in similar countries, divorce rates (just one indicator) are high, as is domestic violence, with insufficient alternatives for the estranged (usually female) parties to these arrangements. Thus ‘unfortunately’.
Dave
i deffo had misunderstood. Thanks for clearing that one for me Dave.
While separation of mom and dad are very hard for kids, you show how it should be done! Well written, d a.
Thank you very much Fred. It takes two, its just the way it worked out.
Real art shows courage. It was pretty brave of you to be so candid. Bittersweet little piece.
Its factual, didn't feel brave at the time or in writing it to be honest. Things just worked out that way.
Very good emotive write d a, that respect for parted parents is so important.
My respect for you increases.
Andy
It all stemmed from a fav photo of my son imprinted on my mind, the smiling faced pale six year old shivvering in his speedos was the inspiration to write this.
I like the tone and style, reads like a very private letter, yet is full of such revealing and vivid details,
really well executed, a great write
Much thank you's indeed sir. As i said to Goldfinch earlier. This stemmed from a very memorable photo of my son aged six on that day. Things could have been so different in many ways but we were lucky that any animosity is forgotten long ago and the good remains.
....wow an honour to know you and read from your soul to keep giving mine... on the only way we know!
Much respect and thanks again for the inspirational push 😉
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