I am sparkling and I am new I shine in this world just like you.
There's nothing broken chipped or rusted but now my body's broken down and busted.
The aches the pain I sometimes cant describe all I know is I want too hide
My sparkle dulls just like my pain I doult I can be whole again.
My shine has gone my glitz my glamour I return my dress upon the hanger.
There is no dancing or twirling you see as now my knees may disagree
My hip my legs my bones they ache I am sure you appreciate. So pop away my jewels and treasures I think you just about have my measure.
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Author:
HeatherBee (Pseudonym) (
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- Comment from author about the poem: It reminds me of my limits now and of things I once did.
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A useful write Heather.
Thankyou.
I'm 100% with you on this.... in my heart i am a fell walker but in my boots i struggle to walk around town (lockdown permitting).
When lockdown is over I plan to go travelling all over the place - I wonder how far my ailments will allow me to go.
You can only stay positive and try.
Those 'jewels and treasures' will always be there to remind you of joyous days in the past and tell you that life was good. You may struggle to do them now but at least you did them and that is good.
Andy
Thankyou Andy your so right.
I like how you used a rather up-tempo beat within your rhyme scheme, to ease the dreary of the read, insuring I engage beyond my kneejerk reaction to 'readers fatigue' for write's with 'complaining' tones,
cleverly executed, I think if you can craft such creative works of self-expression you're more likely on the right track,
a good read, thanks for sharing
Thankyou very much
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