Joe Marcello


Never dismiss the thoughts of the elderly 

For their words and wisdom you can trust 

Because even a mop that is never used 

Will still continue to collect dust 


  • yellowrose

    Catchy writing . I like your words

  • Doggerel Dave

    Not sure about this one at all, Joe.
    Don't agree with the first two lines, especially the second:
    Lines 3 and 4: Mop? dust? a more useless bloody metaphor I would find hard to find.
    Apart from that, there's not a lot wrong with it..... :-)

  • Goldfinch60

    Good fun write Joe.


  • L. B. Mek

    firstly and undeniably an intriguing read,
    although I can definitely understand Dave's pointed comments,
    but somewhere beneath the jarring disparity between your chosen metaphors and the actual message I assume you're trying to convey,
    exists a wonderful write of brevity: highlighting the wisdom in recognising those lessons society's elderly have 'picked up' surviving - life's jagged edges, while traversing time's epistemological rear-view mirrors..

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