Never dismiss the thoughts of the elderly
For their words and wisdom you can trust
Because even a mop that is never used
Will still continue to collect dust
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Author:
Joe Marcello (
Offline) - Published: February 28th, 2021 15:31
- Category: Humor
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Comments4
Catchy writing . I like your words
Thank you very much
Not sure about this one at all, Joe.
Don't agree with the first two lines, especially the second:
Lines 3 and 4: Mop? dust? a more useless bloody metaphor I would find hard to find.
Apart from that, there's not a lot wrong with it..... 🙂
I will put you down as a no vote
Thanks Joe.
Good fun write Joe.
Andy
firstly and undeniably an intriguing read,
although I can definitely understand Dave's pointed comments,
but somewhere beneath the jarring disparity between your chosen metaphors and the actual message I assume you're trying to convey,
exists a wonderful write of brevity: highlighting the wisdom in recognising those lessons society's elderly have 'picked up' surviving - life's jagged edges, while traversing time's epistemological rear-view mirrors..
Way to go. You got it.
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