Fay Slimm.

Enticing

 

 

Enticing.

 

From the first finger of hazy light
fresh rays from
day's entrance shatter dark chains

impeccably.

 

Breeze stirs black dregs to a finish
as streaks of
morning beget break of new dawn

impressively.

 

Unsullied azure displays an astute
need for space 
by removing glimpsed bits of grey

imposingly.

 

Sleep flits away, giving me chance
for early  
attempt to describe nature's  gifts

impellingly. 

 

Caught in night's grasp is no place
to stay when
day's enticing draws poets to write 

impassionly.           

 

                                                                               

Comments11

  • Teddy.15

    You have a true gift of poeticizing the morning sunshine at dawn absolutely charming and uplifting, and as I've been to Cornwall I can relate to the beauty that we also have in our little corners of treasure throughout UK. Thank you.

    • Fay Slimm.

      And you are so kind in reviewing so generously my little writes - many thanks Teddy.

    • Doggerel Dave

      Thanks for your take on an early morning wakening, Fay.
      I shall view my early starts in a more positive light in future....

      • Fay Slimm.

        Great to have your visit and comment Dave - Good to know the read has urged ya to make a bit more of those early morning inspirations .

      • orchidee

        A fine write Fay.
        I have to settle for a morning mist clearing over the local duck pond! Well, that's good sight too. lol.

        • Fay Slimm.

          Ducks are beautiful and to watch them in water is just like a ballet - a good sight certainly Orchi.

        • Goldfinch60

          Wonderful words Fay and so very true for me, maybe one day we will Dawn’s wonderful glory.

          Andy

          • Fay Slimm.

            Thank you sincerely dear Andy for your in-put to the glories of dawn for poetic expressions are ever made better when watching the sun rise or set.

          • Saxon Crow

            Lovely poem Fay. Daybreak, like twilight, is always a moment of magic

            • Fay Slimm.

              Magic is quite the right ward S.C. - to take even a small part in observing the changes when sun rises or sets is as you say -- just Magic - - - glad you enjoyed the read.

            • dusk arising

              I can picture you in my twisted mind's eye sat in the shroud of night facing east clutching pen and notepad, a slight shiver running through you as you beckon the dawn with "come on you ba___rd, Impress me"

              No, not really but you don't get many comments like this to the pound do you?

              • Fay Slimm.

                Ha ha -- You certainly let your fancy feel free when my wordy dawn-message catches your deeper attention - -- maybe I do sit and clutch pen and paper but not as early as sunrise in summer my imaginative friend. Your comments are always most welcome .

              • Neville


                .. a magnificent view superbly penned
                x

                • Fay Slimm.

                  Thanking thee kindly for dropping by for the read - you are always so welcome dear Nev........... x

                • PrEm Ji

                  written with the the rays of new dawn...

                  • Fay Slimm.

                    Grateful thanks for your visit and read my friend.

                  • MendedFences27

                    The glory of morning's Sunrise and its draw on poet's words. A wonderful presentation of first light and how it inspires. Sweet verbiage Fay.- Phil A

                    • Fay Slimm.

                      Dear Phil - - how lovely to know my few words on dawn here have reached your far shores........ so pleased too that you enjoyed the piece.

                    • Accidental Poet

                      Fay, you've done justice to the rising of the morning Sun. Excellent. ; )

                      • Fay Slimm.

                        Your comment after the read is doubly welcome just to know you think my poem did justice to the glory of dawn . Thanking you most sincerely A.P.

                      • L. B. Mek

                        'to describe nature's gifts
                        impellingly.'
                        and ain't that
                        just the perfect summation
                        of your Poetic legacy!
                        I have lost count
                        of how many daybreak poems
                        you've shared with us, Dear Fay
                        but I know for certain
                        after reading each one
                        I'm left hoping that your next
                        won't be too long: in the inking..
                        thank you, what a wondrous depiction
                        truly!

                        • Fay Slimm.

                          Yes I fell in love with dawn-dusk inspiration past moons ago- - you know my passion for all things natural so well - appreciated sincerely are your generous and supportive comments L.B.



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