Himawari - Sunflower
Even with his head
turned slightly
to one side and held low
He shone
and brightly so ..
Erect, proud and golden
Taller
than his counterparts
Spilling petals
on the ground
The poppies and the
cornflowers
all bowed and strewn
abundant ..
Not to mention those
violets
sown ever so lightly
into the
violent hedgerow
Somewhere down below ..
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Your fine words raise a metaphor in my fanciful mind Nev. To belong to that sunflower class eyes need to shine with confident beauty and heads grow taller with maybe looking where best to show care for those growing in violent surroundings - thanking you kindly cos even tiny short me feels a bit taller after thinking on your lines rich in simile...........x
Cor, wot a lovely set o words you just strung together for my little scribble ... Thank you Fay, I am similing from ear to almost there ... 🙂
'Even with his head
turned slightly
to one side and held low
He shone
and brightly so ..
Erect, proud and golden
Taller
than his counterparts'..
'Straining
although, bereft of belief
to glimpse, however brief
that promised: Rose
of scarlet threaded fate'..
赤い糸 運命の赤い糸
A fine write Nev.
Metaphorical of a lass I should meet?! And can ya beat a bit of meta-wotsit?! lol.
Maybe one day ... and no, you can't beat a bit that, can ya ... cheers Mr. O 🙂
You waxing meta-wotsit-ly?!
Though no longer at the peak of his glorious self, he stood out from the well dressed crowd with a dignity unsurpassable.
You got it in one sir ... many thanks n all that jazz ... stay safe, well and true 🙂
As usual loving your work Nev. Brilliant
.... Thank a bunch mate .. much appreciated .. 🙂
Good write, Neville.
Standing tall is a good start for sure.
... Thank you sir .. I'll take your word for that and kindly .. I'm just a nipper 🙂
Beautiful and a delight to read! Oh to see it bloom amongst the lovely flowers, metaphorically I imagine a handsome gents as yourself surrounded by beautiful women admiring from afar,
... Oh' my word, if only ... tis a luverly thought tho' n truly ... Bless you my friend 🙂
Very good words Neville, may that light shine on us all forever.
Andy
cheers Andy .. 🙂
another much appreciated visit, thank you L.B ...
right said Fred .. red thread doomed red thread .. 🙂
Neville,
‘Himawari’ as in Girasole…
Beautiful words for a beautiful flower.🌻
I feel like I’ve been in that field of beauty that you so elegantly have penned with an abundance of metaphors.
Thank you for sharing your pen.
Laura🌻
Yes, absolutely ... and I am so very honoured that you should smile down upon my little scribble so favourably ............... 🌻
How could I not smile upon your ‘little scribble so favorably’…after all, it is my favorite flower that you’ve ‘scribbled’ about.🌻
'He shone
and brightly so ..'
indeed you do, oh graceful wordsmith
Beautiful imagery, such brevity
a deep, meaningful write
thank you! Hyung
I owe ya .. cheers & truly .. Neville
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