Discovery.
Such a clifftop as this where two sat
as sun cut its exit,
lowered its lashes and spread heaven
over new feelings.
Such a dusk as this when youngness
fumbled in deepening
blushes as sweet alchemy pleasured
heights of discovery.
Such a summer as this had buttons
undone as heat crept
into the senses and coupled friends
first became lovers.
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Author:
Fay Slimm. (
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Everything was so new and exciting for us as young lovers. The world became alive all those thousands of days ago.
And you captured all this with words which painted my vivid picture of special times. The clothes we wore, the music we heard, the language we spoke.
A really special poem today Fay for a has-been romantic like me. Into my favourites of course.
Simple and pleasing, Fay.
'Such a summer as this had buttons undone as heat crept' - the excuse, the tension, anticipation - great!
Romantic doesn't even come close.
And that's how it was so long ago for many of us Fay. Like you dipped your quill into our hearts and spoke our very thoughts. So beautiful Fay. ; )
Hot, Fay.
I loved the expressions such as 'lowered its lashes and spread heaven' Cheers
I am not sure I can say much more than what has already been said about these fine words you have made available to us all ... a splendid poem in all respects ... respect my friend ..... x
So wonderful Fay, that time when loved bloomed is so wonderful to remember.
Andy
I love nature, in this poem, I can see the beauty of the sun cut its exit, lowered its lashes, and spread heaven over new feelings." Our feelings, though, are not new but stretch back many years. Awesome poem with many feelings oozing from each word.
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