Omens.
I chased this evening evening's parade,
woven-framed patterns of
tin-foiled filigree, gilt-tied
to greenery's final attempt to beat fade.
I watched as light lightened pale sky,
viewed universe-fired display
night's birthing dance
turning black into starry-eyed silence.
I saw change changing ether-haze hue
to dusk-covered eeriness
creeping round sickle-shaped
moon-smile thru' dull-as-dust gloom.
I heard in day's goodbye goodbye's solo
purple-trailed, scarlet-dyed,
gold-streaked striped azure sung
in lunar duet with dark's rising crescendo.
I knew tonight tonight's black feelings
on sunset-divide, cloned-omens
from cauterized colours
spoke to my waiting canvas so clearly.
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Author:
Fay Slimm. (
Offline) - Published: August 6th, 2021 00:27
- Comment from author about the poem: Another look at a verse of celebration I wrote moons ago - - hope you enjoy.
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- User favorite of this poem: L. B. Mek.
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Comments6
Beautiful art turned into words Fay.
Andy
So kind of you to say so my friend and thank you indeed.
How do you put words together and structure them to produce such richly embroidered tapestry, Fay?
Ah you spoil me by asking how I write as I do Dave - all I can say is that I close my eyes and unconditionally surrender to versifying my style of embroidery - - hope this helps........
Nah - doesn't at all Fay. How do I operationalise that?
I had no particular wish to spoil (as in hurt) you - I was trying to spoil your magic, and obtain something out of the remains to use myself. And of course, I failed completely................
share, and share it again dear Fay
your poetry, gets better with every read
(in my humble opinion)
'I saw change, changing
ether-haze hue to dusk-covered, eeriness
creeping, round sickle-shaped moon-smile
thru' dull-as-dust gloom.
I heard in day's goodbye: goodbye's, solo
purple-trailed, scarlet-dyed, gold-streaked
striped, azure sung
in lunar duet, with dark's rising crescendo. '
Masses of thanks for all your encouragement L.B,. - am delighted you found value in reading Omens.
these words have just found their ever home .. I note how comfortable they sit here ... and my guess is that if they could, they would be smiling with us too .....
Neville .............................. 🙂 x
So good to know Omens have found their ever- home in your warm heart |Nev....... gratefully thanking you for all your reviews. Smilin' back at ya and widely too.............x
While all I can muster is ooooh! and aaaah! to my favorite scene of the day, your words breathes it life
Delighted you felt the life behind some of the lines in Omens dear Suresh - thank you sincerely for all your encouragement.
Always a pleasure to read, Fay. Thank you.
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