You, always had your
art and flair
pony tail and your
hip-hop hair
Me, you dug me out
of Bisco's chair
and somehow
placed me there
. Did you ever see
. beyond outside of me
. was there never ever
. meant to be
. broken heart indemnity
. Now is the time that came
. to put the past to rest
. i never knew what
. became of you but
. for me I gave my best
. (chorus) Goodbye seemed to be our place to be
. I took the car you took the street
. love's bad was never so indiscrete
. like i was gum beneath your feet
you took your time
you made the grade
finally hitched
in yer fine brocade
happy child
in your happy arms
as estranged daddy
paid for all your charms
. (2nd chorus) yes goodbye seemed our place to be
. I got the car, you took the meat
. but there was never, never time to cheat
. a parting never so oh-oh incomplete
. (slow/half time section)
me taking a glance across the street
beneath rainclouds our eyes meet
you look away, then you looked back
familiar face, saying 'you're just Jack '
. (3rd chorus) goodbye seemed to be our place to be
. forever you forever me
. whatever made our chemistry
. found fatal flaws with consistency
. (4th chorus) so goodbye you, goodbye me
. writhing sensuality
. a burned out fire an old ash tree
. the hollow cry of a third degree
. (pause)
. (slow/half time section to the finish)
. now I must say that I agree
. another sip of herbal tea
. lays to rest the autopsy
. of a tear stained, paid for, last decree
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Author:
dusk arising (
Offline) - Published: September 18th, 2021 00:08
- Comment from author about the poem: Song i wrote yesterday, purely imagination before anyone gets all sympathetic or gooey with me lol. oh yes, to clarify just in case, Jack = jack shit = you're nothing
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Comments7
Massive work to get out in a day, dusk - Not pure imagination , you've reworked an experience or two...
Anyway, well done - now I want to see it on youtube or wherever...
Thanks DD, no can do on youtube, i hadn't worked out a score just a melody and lyrics.
Dusk: Having worked and participated in a variety of different environments over a long and chequered life, the dynamic is always the same: Passed to me - If I can say it, you can do it. You have collapsed that - you stated it, you can do it... Work out the score and upload ....... Do let me know , Sir.... 😊
Deffo not in a constructive/practical phase right now.... theyre feeding me on horrible drugs which are giving me nausea and making me feeble.... the mind still ticks over but i'm full of excuses .... sorry m8.
Can't top that - Take care of yourself, dusk.
Very engaging are your words , dusk 🙂 great song
Thank you yellowrose.
Very emotive words d a and so well written.
Andy
Wish i was still in with creative musicians sometimes to give stuff like this a good bash, see where it goes musically. used to be very satisfying developing songs into set pieces.
I listened to the way amy winehouse versed her lyrics and this was deffo inspired by her. She is sadly missed.
Thank you for the recommendation!
I especially love the lines:
"a burned out fire an old ash tree
the hollow cry of a third degree"
I agree with Dave, this needs to be on YouTube lol
I'm no longer in a bunch of musicians so no youtube sorry. Sax and vocals was my thing and i'm an awful guitarist so youtube's a no no.
if I were you sir, I would be bloody pleased with myself .. very pleased in fact ............................... Neville
Thank you Neville, hi praise indeed..... i'm never smug, i just enjoy being creative as and when it strikes.
D.A.,
Wow…
I was totally engrossed in reading your awesome write. I read it a few times to feel and envision the words with music. I felt it played very well.
Thank you for sharing.
Laura🌻
Thank you Laura, that's really pleased me.
I agree with Neville. What do they put in those IV's over there?
Sadly mate it's chemotherapy at the moment and it's making me feel yuk..... sleepy and weak. Been sleeping and waking in this chair for two days lol. Hopefully it'll wear off soon.
The last time i was on chemo it gave me some really weird poetry.... dunno what's coming this time round.
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