O my friend,
What do you think?
Why are you shrink?
The darkness around you will be bright
All your pain will be healed, you have inside,
Your journey will be a celebration, around,
What is lost, will soon be found,
Just wait for while,
Just more a while.
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Author:
Ali (Pseudonym) (
Offline) - Published: October 7th, 2021 00:10
- Comment from author about the poem: Just keep patience 🙂🙃
- Category: Reflection
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Comments2
Patience is a virtue that we all need to have.
Andy
Yes my dear poet. 🙃
Thanks Andy.
needs a little rewording, to smoothen the delivery, but your hopeful message is faultless!
a wonderful read, thanks for sharing
'What, are you thinking?
Why are you, shrinking?
The darkness around you
is hiding the brightness, beyond
and, All your pain
can be healed from inside - out,
Your journey will morph
into a cause for celebration,
for all those around you'
(forgive my rudeness,
I just wanted to offer you a feeble sample
an example, of how your wording can become a little smoother or easier to understand)
So many thanks dear poet for your kind comment and your effort to explain my thoughts in a better way with smoothness. As you know I am still a student and write some words in my free times, I am not so good or expert so you really should that you did, in this way we(i mean the young and inexperienced poets) can learn from you. I am really so thankful for your comment. Thank you again. 😊
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