AND PUPPETS DANCE
Amorphous dreams that masquerade
and influenced by lassitude
until her notes again invade
like whispers in the wind.
In intervals of quietude
her muted voice with ease conveyed
upon a stage where few birds sing
her true melodic charm displayed.
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Author:
Michael Edwards (
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- Comment from author about the poem: I love abstract art and this has crept across into much of my poetry where love the use of words and meter above all else. This short piece, which doesn't fall into into any poetic genre that I know of, could be described as such. Interested to know how it is interpreted by anyone reading it.
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Good write and pic M.
How does Miss Berles see this?!
through her SpectaBerles.
interpretation.... a haunting sadness pervades and invades otherwise light hearted dreams.
Great flow and an amazing mental picture/story developes.
Interesting picture, is that the musical instrument heronimus bosch played upon.
I am a huge fan
of form, being utilised to accentuate an aspect
of the poetry or the poetic voice;
its much more meaningful than
words and syllables being counted out and stifled to fit-in with some random form or meter rules,
at least for me,
(but each to their own)..
anyway, there are two immediate and direct connections I make
when looking at the aesthetics of your poem, initially
firstly: I link the 'dance'
in your title
with the easily discernible line pattern
of 'One' - 'one, two, three'
just like, some traditional dance steps are counted out,
(introducing concepts of melodic synchronicity
in the relationship your poetry goes-on to depict)
second: your choice
of layout for the two stanzas being interchangeable
almost like how everything is reversed in a mirror;
whilst still being a true a reflection;
(just like the prevalent symmetry
imbued,
in the abstract/surrealism of your painting);
and then, words like 'amorphous, masquerade and lassitude'
are utilised with purpose to emphasis the free spirit nature
of the person you're describing in the second stanza
(almost ambivalent or abstracted
or more poetically,
someone impossible to describe completely,
someone who exists beyond everyday characterisation or labelling,
someone genuinely: Unique
in your eyes)..
and then lastly,
you hint at the intimacy in your relationship, because
you describe how this 'melodic charm' of hers
only show, during rare times
when its least expected for her to display these alluring traits
'intervals of quietude'
'where few birds sing'...
(all in all
I found this poem to be a beautiful dedication,
impassioned in its choice wording
and comprehensively - transparently sincere, in its portrayal)
simply a brilliant work of Art
straight from the heart...
(as always
forgive me if I've missed the mark completely
and gone, in a completely different direction to your own,
original interpretation or meaning)
thanks for sharing, my friend
this was a genuine poetic treat!
Someone's quiet time ( daydream ) is unexpectedly interrupted by a bird / someone singing.
I liked the structure and rhyming. The form of this poem gives it its beauty. The words flow, the scene is depicted and yet there is room for interpretation. Lovely poem. - Phil A.
A lot of your best ideas, techniques, and intuition came together in this lovely piece, popping up almost mystically from that mild-mannered draftsman in your portrait. I'll memorize this one.
PS You suggest this doesn't fall into any genre you know of. I think it's the one called poetry.
You have a gift of two mediums, and the ease with which you interplay with both, captures our senses in wonderment
This is a fine example of why I fell in love with poetry regardless of genre ...
seriously good Michael & then some sir ..................... Neville
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