Neville

Linger

Linger

 

Just because you cannot see me

does not mean I’m nowhere near

and

just because you cannot feel me

does not mean I’m less than real

I am not

gone, I need to linger

just to check that nothing’s wrong

I never

told you I might be leaving

I just could not find the right words

to place

inside this mourning song for

safe keeping, until this whole affair

is  over

and I am well and truly done .. x

 

 

Comments10

  • Fay Slimm.

    A haunt of a mourning song this - it
    reminds me that "Parting is such sweet sorrow " when hearts want to linger on........ tender as ever mon ami are these lines of gentle appeal.......x

    • Neville



      thanking you is never less than a pleasure my dear lady Fay ....................... I could do it all day long 🙂 x

    • L. B. Mek

      'I just
      could not find the right words
      to place

      inside
      this mourning song
      for safe keeping,'..
      (how acutely, you portray
      that need, to feel
      like our Time spent
      at another's side, won't
      be considered, so miniscule
      and steeped in irrelevance, in seconds
      after, that abrupt goodbye
      of our raked-raw, worded emotions..)
      subtly poignant, a heart wrenching depiction
      of the person in the relationship
      who, lingers
      in the embers of the ruins, long abandoned...
      simply beautiful, dear masterful Poet
      love the unassuming flow and accessible wording
      one of your very Best!
      'in my humble opinion'

      • Neville



        Cor blimey Guv'nor, got me lost for words so you have sir .......................... thanks a bundle .. Neville

      • dusk arising

        Beautifully told, of emotions contortions as we endure trying times in 'togetherness'.

        • Neville



          thank you DA .. so very much appreciated my friend .................. Neville

        • orchidee

          Good write N. Yes, I meat a gal. She can't decide whether to stay or go. I wish KP would go! lol.

          • Neville



            not surprised in the slightest ........................ ta Orchidee ..................................................... 🙂

          • Robert Haigh

            Such a poignant write. I'd like to think our loved ones who have departed are still able to look on, even if we cannot see them nor feel them. Sometimes I do think I can feel the presence of my departed parents, and I still live in hope we may meet again somewhere on some unknown celestial plane. It could all be in my mind, but I still live in hope. A fine write, my friend!

            • Neville



              It would seem we think and feel similarly .. and I most sincerely hope its not just all in your mind because its in mine too ...........................................thanks Rob .... Neville

            • Teddy.15

              This is beautiful I wish had someone watching over me to see I'm ok, actually I have had my own experiences but I do love the way you write and this has every little bit of Neville inside a gentleman. Never give up if it's worth watching over my dear friend. 🤗

              • Neville



                thank you Teddy .. I reckon we all think like that every now and then .. even if we dont exactly shout about it ... and just between you n me .. if I go first, I will watch your back from wherever I might be x

              • spilleronsheet

                So emotional and so poignant
                The words brought tears
                And so many memories lingered beside
                To those whom I lost
                I wonder whether they are happy where they are
                I wonder if they are watching me
                Such a mourning
                I remember my grand parents
                With whom most of my childhood memories are embed in my mind
                I am pretty sure they are watching me
                Well penned dear Neville
                The poetry felt so personal to me
                Thank you for sharing

                • Neville



                  I am touched by your openness & generosity my friend .. many thank you's ..................... Neville

                • Doggerel Dave

                  First Nev, I have to state that I like the piece but am unable to put my rational spin on it. Further, I see some connection to the poem immediately preceding.......

                  • Neville



                    interesting .. thanks Dave .. I swear that I shall try & make todays scribble quite different from anything else & completely unconnected to anything except my own frontal lobe & cerebral hemispheres .... N 🙂

                  • Goldfinch60

                    Very emotive words Neville and so true in life.

                    Andy

                    • Neville



                      Thank you my golden friend ................................... in fact, thanks a bullion ... N 🙂

                    • Garth Rakumakoe

                      It is poignant in its own way, Neville, and as usual its emotion is quite well carved out. You have a brilliant pen and mind sir.

                      • Neville



                        and you sir are far too generous by half .......................................... thank you & truly Garth .. Neville



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