daughter of a rich man
took my heart and set me free
just a walk away
my last futures day
we were footsteps on the beach
so come on in the waters lovely
so come on in, not too deep
let me be the one discovery
come on in, come on in
uncover me
she stepped on tongues
of young men's glances
with the grace of all was meant to be
but when the sun went down
she made all of me
(all i'd ever be) whispered
so come on in the waters lovely
so come on in to where is deep
let me hold embrace you gently
come on in, come on in
make love with me
through the tall grass
she still whispers
where they found her, so they say
an evening star shall never set now
and tide will never wash away
so come on in, her waters lovely
so come on in above my head
and i will love you now forever
come on in, no don't you come
but oh i long to, oh how i miss you
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dusk arising (
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Super lovelorn words d a.
Andy
You'd think i'd lost a lover in the long grass wouldnt you. I just find it odd how i wrote this because it went places i hadn't intended it to.
Those words often go that way for me as well d a.
Andy
Yes, come on in, said a certain church - the waters lovely. Rich? No problem. Join us and you'll soon be broke. Doh!
But not ALL churches.
Lady was filled with magic
What a wonderful sight
Is it her beauty or the beholder who holds the beauty
Such beautiful pearls you stringed together dear poet
So poetic and lovestruck
Very romantic dear Dusk
Pure imagination and a few of life's experiences sewn in along the way to eek it out a bit. Thank you spiller.
Beautiful love song such imagery and metaphor interwoven throughout. Very nice
Thank you woundedheart.
The flame of a love still lingering shall never be extinguished, and in words so poemed will always linger on.
Pure fiction but i did involve myself emotionally when writing it as I always try to do. Thanks SureshG
Magical write....
The magic is in the reader Lorna, a piece either sparks something inside or it doesn't. Quite a lot of people read my stuff and leave no comment so I imagine they didn't feel any magic.... Maybe my style doesn't suit a lot of readers.
Thank you for your super succinct comment though.... always appreciated.
I love the flow of this piece, so beautifully woven! I love it!
Thank you Garth. Sometimes a piece just falls out of your fingers onto the keyboard, this one though was surprisingly awkward to write. I'd left it alone for a long time before initially posting it and i'm still not completely happy with it..... maybe one day i'll subject it to some surgery LOL.
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