tonite I read your poetry
and filled up deep inside
time and again my tears fell
at thought of things I write
sometimes so sorrowful
and oft I think im pleased
but here in tears of all your feelings
l'm like a void inside
I know I feel the passion
to show my world inside
but your pain your colours
your verve and lust
overpowers how I write
nonetheless I cannot stop
I have to let this out
its here in me and it needs to be
outside and cast about
for in my street and in the store
you'll never see what's me
until I open up my shelf
and you read my poetry
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dusk arising (
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- Comment from author about the poem: Yes the penultimate line really does say shelf.
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Great writing , dusk 🙂🙂 really like this poem .,
I especially like these lines
but your pain your colours
your verve and lust
overpowers how I write
And yes , I like how you mention opening the shelf
Thank you Rose, I was unsure whether readers would think it was a typo and should be self.
Nice one Dusk , Deep feeling expressed well !!
The last para , says it all !!
Thank you Vamsi. Those who meet me will never know me without reading my poetry.
True Dusk !! No one can fathom the depths of a poet !! They are a never ending mystery always !!:)
So beautiful
If love could be written
This is the finest
So emotive and so warm
The closing lines were just epic
So well the good was so felt and it’s silence made a great noise
A bug clap dear Dusk
LOL at your tiny typo in last line there. Don't alter it, I don't take myself seriously and that made me laugh out loud. Thank you spiller.
Deeply emotional words d a.
Andy
I guess that's just the kind of rock n roll guy i am..... well on the inside anyway.
Good write dusk. I never noticed that verve and lust when I wrote my poetry. You found it out when you read my poems! lol.
Yes i noticed how your pour out your OCD each day LOL.
A beautiful write dusk I really enjoyed reading this piece
Thank you for dropping by and leaving your nice comment katie.
Beautiful the inner self requiring release not through anger or tears but by beautifully presented poetry, 👏 a wonderful piece of self preservation to exorcise one's own daemons.
Those deamons are definitely there and I feel them when I'm emotionally involved with my poetic subject which I need to be to write.... even if it's a complete fiction.
Thank you for your super comments here.
truly, each poem
is like sharing a page
from our eclectic personality,
a wonderful metaphor
for poetry, inked with sincerity..
a great read, thanks Dusk
Really love this one Dusk, particularly the final Stanza. I can so relate. Very well done my friend🙂
exquisite ... priceless ink in my book sir ... or any bloody book for that matter .......................................... N
Such beautiful lines expressed in this poem. Thank you for sharing.
The most intense are the internal battles, as so clearly evident in your poetry
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