Here and now once looked so far away, that somehow it can still feel like yesterday
Waiting for the train and the most precious 72 hours
To try and give all my love in just a part time showers
Still grateful for marriage that started it off but two homes were better than one that didn't get along
The reason I wrote poetry to fulfil something that wasn't there, find strength to keep going and not disappear
Many storms have been ridden with doors opened and closed, yet here I am on a peak of a mountain feeling unexposed.
My tears run down the valley and now meadows can be felt for miles, in a decade I got divorce then had another child
This has become a dream within a dream one I truly forgot to be, walking hand in hand with harmony.
I guess it is all about the journey, luckily it ain't over for me but I'd like to write a better finale
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Poetic Dan (
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- Comment from author about the poem: Could not help but carry on my thoughts with yesterday's note's and will get back to all those wonderful positive vibes that kept me up doing all this... been a while and flagging today for it but worth it. Happy Friday
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Brilliant!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
'To try and give all my love in just a part time showers
Still grateful for marriage that started it off
but two homes were better than one
that didn't get along'
Ha! you picked the line that runs the deepest
Always a pleasure my friend!
Great writing , Dan š I especially love these lines
My tears run down the valley and now meadows can be felt for miles
walking hand in hand with harmony.
Writing can be so helpful
Iām
Glad it helps you
Happy Friday to you ))
Lol I'm actually finding it hard to still not cry over those lines....I guess because its easier to write than feel.
Thank you as ever for the company my friend
'To try and give my love in part time showers.' Words of genius that I can relate too. In fact the whole poem is relatable Dan. Brilliant.
Would this be a birthday visit? If so many happy returns but also new year to you my friend.
That little line did actually stop for a while and wanted more to say but just like the time I didn't get. I have to let it go!
Lol
Thanks for the inspiration
No it's not mmy birthday. Unless I was American! Happy New year to you too buddy.
A better finale is what we all need. Well expressed!
May we go out louder and proudest than we have even been.
Thank you my friend
Some sadness but so positive words now. Beautiful.
Thank you for your time and kind words.
It's good to share we can over come sadness
Always appreciated
Wonderful Dan, the finale of your life is going to be so very wonderful, it is so very good at the moment though, appreciate every moment of it.
Andy
One can only keep trying and with the support you've given no wonder I can feel like I'm flying....
Thank you my friend
"Here and now once looked so far away" . From your write I pick lessons from a life I haven't even lived. This is a powerful piece, PD. So much real life woven into it, with its ups and downs. This is definitely a favorite for me. Thank you sir.
Wow.. thank you my friend is hard not to sometimes see this as dribble but often can be healing and receive words like yours.
Truly appreciated
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