Fay Slimm.

Mislaid

 

 

Mislaid.

 

We both lived in disharmony's fiercely heedless debate
mindless of relationship's worth.

We shuffled in biased cut-price ideas of winner-created
pretentious avoidance  of hurt.

Agreement went into time's melting pot as shut-eyed
we arranged two separate worlds.


We talked ourselves into dry ground as thirst denied
rank pride forgot sorry is earned .

Love's ultimate non-sound got mislaid under actions
where loss of care was preferred.

Shall we re-construct silence and give Us the chance 
to build space where hearing is learned ?       

     

Comments9

  • dusk arising

    With age has come patience, understanding and a less demanding attitude.... perhaps repair patches to buy time when younger will save losing the most important relationship in ones life. And not have to live through the regrets of losing it together with the subsequent heartaches earned from follow-on relationships with others. Easy to be philosophical with hindsight for me.

    Another fine piece of writing Fay which certainly chimed for me.

    • Fay Slimm.

      Your considered review of Mislaid is from a wise mind my friend - yes hindsight might give us cause for regrets if we let go too soon. Much appreciated as always dear Dusk

    • Keith

      Another strong piece...

      • Fay Slimm.

        My thanks for your visit and kind review Keith -- a sticky subject and was in two minds about posting but put it to public test and it turned out fair .

        • Keith

          Never be afraid to share, Fay. You have a great talent for word play and rhythm. And if the subject matters to you - it will to others. Poetry is to be shared I believe - and the ideas within can be new to some - giving inspiration or pleasure or provoke thoughts and discussion - and to others they will read them and think, yes, someone out there feels the same, experienced the same thing, I am not alone.

        • Paul Bell

          It's the weirdest thing when relationships crash. Couples don't move into the future, but play out the relationship in the past. You can see how therapists make a fortune.

          • Fay Slimm.

            Ha - -- yes I agree it seems crazy that some couples dwell too much on past reasons for the big crash and get all het up with what is over - - far better to move on and learn eh ? - thanks masses for your visit and read.

          • Teddy.15

            Dear Fay a lesson to all sometimes just taking the time to listen to ourselves and others can make that difference and bring a positive difference too. I see many things in here forgiveness and understanding an empathy which is a tool we all should use. Beautiful your last stanza is so powerful. ๐Ÿ’– Remember to embrace

            • Fay Slimm.

              You summed up the vital needs when things are going awry with close relationships dear Teddy - - empathy sure is a tool for use - glad you honed in on the last stanza which we all hope turned out a success.

            • L. B. Mek

              'mindless of relationship's worth.'
              if we but could
              find a way, to correct this One curse
              from faltering our future generations, unmapped horizon's
              we'll have solved
              the root cause of so much hurt, they'll inherit
              by following
              our doomed examples...
              (just such a relatable read, dear Fay
              beautifully unfurled)

              • Fay Slimm.

                Yes your words of comment remind us of the examples for offspring who have often to cope with mindless parental behaviour - -those root causes of crash need to be given more thought I agree. So pleased you were able to relate to the read of Mislaid.

              • spilleronsheet

                If there is a way
                To go back
                And mend that was broken
                I guess itโ€™s not bad to go back and strengthen what we had
                A beautiful poetry dear Fay
                And those last lines were simply jewels on crown

                • Fay Slimm.

                  Yes I agree spills - - to remember the things we were is a good start to mending what we have become eh - - bless you for reading and sharing
                  your comment.

                • Rozina

                  One of the toughest challenges in life is handling relationships. Your piece resonates with me. Thank you.

                • Goldfinch60

                  That silence must always be re-constructed to give the chance for life to be good between you once more - all will be well.

                  Andy

                • Neville



                  now let this be a lesson to the lot of ya ... the lady has written something here for us all to heed ... & that aint no typo .................... N



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