Mislaid.
We both lived in disharmony's fiercely heedless debate
mindless of relationship's worth.
We shuffled in biased cut-price ideas of winner-created
pretentious avoidance of hurt.
Agreement went into time's melting pot as shut-eyed
we arranged two separate worlds.
We talked ourselves into dry ground as thirst denied
rank pride forgot sorry is earned .
Love's ultimate non-sound got mislaid under actions
where loss of care was preferred.
Shall we re-construct silence and give Us the chance
to build space where hearing is learned ?
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Fay Slimm. (
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With age has come patience, understanding and a less demanding attitude.... perhaps repair patches to buy time when younger will save losing the most important relationship in ones life. And not have to live through the regrets of losing it together with the subsequent heartaches earned from follow-on relationships with others. Easy to be philosophical with hindsight for me.
Another fine piece of writing Fay which certainly chimed for me.
Your considered review of Mislaid is from a wise mind my friend - yes hindsight might give us cause for regrets if we let go too soon. Much appreciated as always dear Dusk
Another strong piece...
My thanks for your visit and kind review Keith -- a sticky subject and was in two minds about posting but put it to public test and it turned out fair .
Never be afraid to share, Fay. You have a great talent for word play and rhythm. And if the subject matters to you - it will to others. Poetry is to be shared I believe - and the ideas within can be new to some - giving inspiration or pleasure or provoke thoughts and discussion - and to others they will read them and think, yes, someone out there feels the same, experienced the same thing, I am not alone.
It's the weirdest thing when relationships crash. Couples don't move into the future, but play out the relationship in the past. You can see how therapists make a fortune.
Ha - -- yes I agree it seems crazy that some couples dwell too much on past reasons for the big crash and get all het up with what is over - - far better to move on and learn eh ? - thanks masses for your visit and read.
'mindless of relationship's worth.'
if we but could
find a way, to correct this One curse
from faltering our future generations, unmapped horizon's
we'll have solved
the root cause of so much hurt, they'll inherit
by following
our doomed examples...
(just such a relatable read, dear Fay
beautifully unfurled)
Yes your words of comment remind us of the examples for offspring who have often to cope with mindless parental behaviour - -those root causes of crash need to be given more thought I agree. So pleased you were able to relate to the read of Mislaid.
If there is a way
To go back
And mend that was broken
I guess it’s not bad to go back and strengthen what we had
A beautiful poetry dear Fay
And those last lines were simply jewels on crown
Yes I agree spills - - to remember the things we were is a good start to mending what we have become eh - - bless you for reading and sharing
your comment.
One of the toughest challenges in life is handling relationships. Your piece resonates with me. Thank you.
That silence must always be re-constructed to give the chance for life to be good between you once more - all will be well.
Andy
now let this be a lesson to the lot of ya ... the lady has written something here for us all to heed ... & that aint no typo .................... N
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