“Once we leave a place is it there[?]”
- Myung Mi Kim
Rivers call to me
Indistinct babbling and whispering
That fills the empty mind
Upon the water floats a flower
Which trickles into your nostrils
Like your mother’s perfume – and wasted time
I get up from the luscious grass
And amble my way to the wooden
Cottage, lying my head on the threadbare pillow
Here, I’m at home.
Purple-spotted mushrooms wave to me
Rustling trees with droopy leaves, undulating
They’re signaling my arrival,
The gnomes huddle around my legs
And are quick to tug me left and right
They lead me to a Golden Path and on the other side
There’s a blurry figure
with aspects I’ve been acquainted with:
Tall posture and Golden hair,
So, I rush to this enigma
And in doing so am lifted by the breezes’ sighs
Going up,
Rising,
Ascending over clouds of silver linings -
I lift my head from the dusty pillow
And exit the dainty cottage
In sighing relief, I come to see
The rivers of evocation
Continue to call to me -
Without further hesitation,
I jump in.
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Author:
Rocky Lagou (
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- Comment from author about the poem: This is a fun piece I wrote a bit ago that leaves a lot of room for interpretation. Its central topics are time and nostalgia and the yearning for the past. The "Golden-haired" figure is a person (which I won't bluntly reveal) that was very fond to me and my development; I'll have a deeper poem coming out soon about this "enigma." But I hope you enjoy this piece and delve into all the possible meanings that are sprinkled throughout. 🌈⏰
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If this was a sixties' poem, I would assume you're at Woodstock, and the drugs are just kicking in. In saying that, gnomes are pleasant wee things.
HEHEHH!!! Omg this comment is to die for! Wellllll......... I was going for a "psychedelic" vibe so I'm glad you at least saw that 😅. But honestly this poem is very interpretive so the gnomes could definitely be perceived as actual scary dwarfs or maybe something a little more symbolic. Thanks for the beautiful reply! 😁👍🌟
Like a dream having it's way with us we are led thru the teachings to behold that reality is but an illusion.
Wow this reply was written so eloquently! I'm glad you discerned one of the layers of this poem! Life is a journey and memories can be a light at times in the dark tunnels. Life can be "but an illusion." 💖🌟😉
Good write Rocky.
A similar (maybe not?) quote to the one you posted - 'I was in such a rush, I met myself coming back from shopping, while I was on my way there! Eh? lol.
Thanks so much Orchidee! Also that quote is definitely akin to the one I posted 😅! Quite a funny one! Anyways, I'm glad you enjoyed it!
Ohh, we gotta laugh at our own jokes. Well, it might be that no one else laughs at them! heehee.
A beautiful imagery
With mix of old memories
With pinch of mystery
With dust of desire
With a bit of fantasy
With a sense of calm
And nevertheless an aroma of yearning
Well scripted dear Rocky
Thanks so much! It's great to hear from you! I appreciate that you considered "yearning" as a theme in this one because it is for sure an important one in this poem. I'm also glad you digged the whole fantasy vibe I was going for. It's for sure a lot of emotions at once but it all comes down to a conclusion: the past. Lovely to hear from you! 💖✨
I really like the vibes of this poem! I did actually not think about drugs at first haha but this might just be my naivety.
Especially the line with "clouds of silver linings" made me think of a mental safe-space. Something to come back to during difficult times. Also, a bit unconventional but, my mind brought up Taylor Swift lyrics. In her song "gold rush" she writes: "gleaming, twinkling (...) so inviting, I almost jump in".
Okay you honestly hit it on the mark with the "silver linings" line. It's an indication to a better and healthier future. It's supposed to represent everything that is going to be. That "mental safe-space" as you put it, so kudos to you on that one. However, I will admit that Tay Tay didn't come to mind when referencing jumping in but reading the lyrics it could be a similar tone we're going for. By "jumping in" it's supposed to be like a total acceptance of character and past. Despite rough upbringings or loss of loved ones, the future is always there. So yeah a lot of meanings but I'm glad you were able to dig a little into this poem and found it enjoyable. Stay safe! (p.s. I also love Tay Tay 😅)
There is so much woven into your poem. I feel that I need to go through it several times to understand the different layers. This is a great piece of a puzzle. Thank you.
Thanks so much for your input Rozina! I'm glad you appreciated the style I was going for. I'll give you some clues: the "gnomes" are small creatures that are usually depicted as energetic in pop culture. What part of our history was energetic and small? I'll also say that the first two stanzas foreshadow the subsequent stanzas. The "wasted time" is referencing the "gnomes," and the smell of "mother's perfume" references the "Golden-haired enigma." That's as far I'll disclose. Thanks once more! 💖😁
The poem sounded great.
Thanks for comment! I'm happy to see you considered the sonic delivery of this piece. I strived to create a "meter-like" sing-song feel with the poem and although it isn't fixed to any meter I'm glad you saw what I was going for. Have a great day! 👍
Wonderful wording. Beautiful images. Well done.
Thanks for the comment! I'm glad you enjoyed the imagery that I presented and I hope it took you for a ride through my thoughts. ✨🌟
I really like this poem, its so well written and as you say, open to interpretation. Love this!
Thanks so much Christina! It's glad to get some feedback on this poem as it is a favorite of mine. The poem definitely requires more than one reading in order to assimilate all the possible meanings but I hope that you enjoyed the work! Thanks once more, have a great day! 💖🌠
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