Tantrastic
In still embrace, we hold me close and strain for the rhythm of our heart.
Remembering, we breathe and hold my breath, we hold my breath and then we breathe.
We look at me and I ask?
We say hold and hold and hold and hold …
Remembering, we breathe and hold my breath, we hold my breath and breathe.
And we ask? We ask …
Remembering, we breathe, hold, breathe, hold, breathe, we hold my breath and breathe.
If we could, if we could fly. If we could, if we could shine. If we could, if we could still time.
The clock hesitates, then ticks a tock.
A rush of time that cannot rush.
A swift of time with one pace swamps the clock, a tick a tock, a tick a tock … at one, at rest.
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Author:
Tangowilliam (
Offline) - Published: February 24th, 2022 09:40
- Category: Erotic
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Comments1
Wow! This was an interlaced poem that was so profound. My personal interpretation on this poem is that moment in love that is essentially the zenith of the relationship. Where the TWO, become ONE. It's a romance that is so euphoric that the two lovers spiritually or in some metaphysical way, fuse together. It's an infatuation. And I feel like you cleverly, and suitably, expressed that when you intentionally used the pronouns "we" to describe feelings that is being experienced by the speaker of the poem only. So although the speaker may be the only one sensing and experiencing these "breaths" that are very prominent in the poem, it is continuously preceded by that joint word: "we." I also want to note the line, "if we could, if we could still time" as I find it has a double meaning. It's almost impossible to read that line without having the word "steal" come up in your mind instead of "still." So I feel like you can be expressing the feeling of wanting to stop time forever and live in this world of love forever, and that you also want to be able to take back time from the past. Very thought-provoking! Bravo! 👏
Thank you. You got it in one!
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