Waiter,
“give me a dark roast.”
Light low,
Lite creamer -
Proselytize
The dreamers
Into pure purity,
Extract the bits
And sediment
and leave only the bare minimum
left for living -
Happiness is redundant
For on this table
We’re drinking coffee,
Coffee with the caffeine
Of the nectar and ambrosia -
You’ll catch a hint
If you surrender to doubt,
You’ll catch a tang
If you surrender.
Transmutation
On your Butterfly
Mind -
Waiter,
“give me another.”
Don’t complain about the taste, or the lack thereof
One after the other
You’ll feel it creeping in
One after another
“Ah- ah- Ech!”
Don’t give me a hard time!
Just embrace the taste
Of N-Stoff coffee on your ignitable tongue -
“Bitter?”
No bitter, your bitter
This is better.
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Author:
Rocky Lagou (
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- Comment from author about the poem: This poem is my first attempt on persona poetry. So, the speaker of this poem is supposed to be a separate character which is distinct from any qualities of me personally. It's definitely a poem that isn't too straightforward with meaning. The whole scene that I'm painting and the characters and the coffee, are all symbolic. This poem is one long metaphor for something deeper than what the surface presents. I hope it stirs you into thinking! 💖😃
- Category: Religion
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Comments5
It’s certainly an engaging poem ! Great writing 🙂
Thanks so much Rose! (If you'll allow me to call you that 😅) I really appreciate you dropping by and leaving your uplifting comments. I hope you got the meaning of the poem. It's supposed to dabble in faith and the way in which it can seem so cult-like. Sometimes believers just take it too far. 💖💖
Like the mad tea drinkers trying to convert me away from coffee.
You can try, but it ain't going to happen.
Hehe!! 😅 oh Paul your comments always give me a good giggle. I wouldn't every try to repel you from coffee!! I'm a coffee-lover as well. Anyways, thanks for dropping by, I appreciate your input! 💖☕
What a beautiful and well written poem! i get the religion and the purity of it you write about, if not careful, it can turn people off. Wonderful and engaging poem!
Thanks so much Christina! It's so fulfilling to see that you grasped the message. There's a few symbolical elements sprinkled throughout the poem as well that, when discovered, will give you a deeper insight into the meaning of the poem. I'll give you a few hints, the "waiter" is symbolic for someone who is always giving something to the speaker. What figure in life and in religion is depicted as a "provider?" The coffee I'll tell you directly what it's supposed to symbolize. The "coffee" represents the religious fanatics attempting to convert others into their belief (the proselytization.) In the Bible the believers are said to be "the salt of the earth." And what does salt do? It gives flavor to things. So the reason the people that are receiving this "coffee" (an attempt at conversion) without tasting the actual coffee ("Don’t complain about the taste, or the lack thereof") is because they themselves aren't actually followers of the theology. Hence, the only way to "taste the coffee" (become an adherent of the religion) is to "surrender to doubt" and eventually just "surrender" in total to ourselves and allow the religion to take over your entire life. So that's just a little help so you can understand the poem a little more. There's still a few more symbols strewn throughout the poem. Either way, thanks for stopping by my poem! Have a great day! 💖☕
Thanks for breaking down the poem for me! You have a great day too!!!
The next cup of coffee I drink I'll remember your poem and explanation. I love coffee but can drink tea without any problems.
Hehe! Thanks for the comment Rozina! I hope you had some time to unlock some of the hidden meanings in the poem! It's definitely a poem that you have to read more than once in order to fully understand. Have a lovely day sipping on coffee! ☕💖
The bitter truth is better than a sweet lie. I wonder the 'humans' were born this or have become like this...
Yes! Very true and wise words! I focused on presenting the idea of "religion gone fanatic" in this poem and I hope you captured that message through the symbolism spread throughout the piece. I appreciate your input and may you have a blessed day! 💖✨
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