Know when you read this
that words are on a mission
to rip you apart
the skin of the drum
conceals the hollow cadence
waiting for a touch
If you don't know,hear
there's a keepsake box within
seek the key that locks
In staggered review
I am grateful that I see
you need some caring
Music-low enough
to gently wave the inks kiss
paper melodies
Scented touch it stirs
grabbing the strings that hide
on bridges to the heart
Grateful smiles sipping
the giggles within the wine
teeter off the lip
Individuals touch
Bespoke personalities
find your likeminded
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dean langmuir (
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- Comment from author about the poem: Had some fun with 575,scheme.
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I love that line: "paper melodies." Pretty much a perfect epitome of poetry. I love this sensation this poem gives me and it's ripe with emotion.
Thanks as always Rocky,this 575 format was fun,maybe not Haiku or senryu in context,but fun to write,take care
I most like the one about smiles sipping the giggles within the wine. They are all very nice!
Thank you C,they came out easy,so I thought I would share,take care.
great work!
enjoyed...
Dahlia
Dalhia thank you as always just for reading,I will try not to inflate too much from your kind words,enjoy your day,poet on.
I love your many allusions to writing, so cleverly done and with such finesse. Well done, beautiful poem!
Thank you Bella,I try to be allusive and I must of with this one,I look forward to the next ones I write,take care,poet on.
Good 575 format poems Dean.
I have a shortlist of 'formats' to my hymn-poems. I can let you know one or two - or about ten, if you wish. There's not hundreds of them!
O that would be great,I have purposely not read poetry before because I didn't want to know anything about it so I wouldn't copy words or style.Now I want to know everything,I really thankyou and all MPS for the comments and am enjoying learning from all you,some of these young poets,blow me a way,what are the years goiing to bring to them.You take care and poet on.
OK - some formats (or metres) have names too. Try an easy-ish one of 8.6.8.6. called Common Metre. It may show as 'C.M.' in hymn books.
Or, and example of a more complicated one is 14.14.4.7.8. Or you can break down the 14's into 6s and 8s, giving 6.8.6.8.4.7.8. Sounds like Bingo! lol.
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Enjoyed the series.👍
Eugene thank you for reading,take care and poet on
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