throughout the land is word re-told
of winged death and flame
unto the ears of unconsoled
who wouldst the beasts arraign
whilst o'er the heavens elspenore
an epoch passed in slumber
awakened sensed the hideous spore
grown both in strength of number
behind each drawn and fast latched door
the fearful dimmed their light
as land was torn and cattle slewn
for terror reigned the night
up stood a child of Nasolen
afraid not of their spore
to face the winged malcontents
and wield his fathers sword
Oh hear ye gods of elspenore
who's glory songs we choir
bear witness i shall yield no more
till my last drawn breath expires
into the burning midnight death
son of slain and widowed line
stood firm and drew of noble breath
till dawning lit the skies
no angered thunder spoke that day
no fiery lightning flashed
no dragon smote the child away
for beneath him laid their dashed
The sword i hold to be the truth
affirms our deathly chore
we shall proudly stand with bloodied blade
before the gods of elspenore
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Author:
dusk arising (
Offline) - Published: April 1st, 2022 00:05
- Comment from author about the poem: Something from 2019 again with a tweak here and there.
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'Oh hear ye gods of elspenore
who's glory songs we choir
bear witness I shall yield no more'..
fantasy, with liberating
closet mind's
as its nucleus of intent..
a wonderful read Dusk
thank you, again
Was a bit of fun to write too. Thank you LBM.
I love this rhyme scheme you got sort of strewn throughout the piece. I definitely see that "less is more" you mentioned in my post today. It's nice to see that succinctness being utilized to allow the reader space to interpret. Also I've read "The Odyssey" and isn't Elspenor the drunken who stayed behind when Odysseus and his crew visited Circe?
Someone asked me something similar before - I think thats elsinore something to do with Hamlet. I must have heard of it and taken it in subliminally because the similarity is so obvious. However it was unintentional but i'm stuck with it lol.
I'm pleased you saw what i had mentioned to you in this piece. Each reader will picture it in their own way. Not one will see it as i perceived it when i wrote it. For me it's sci-fi/sci-fantasy and the 'gods' of elspenore are an advanced alien race on a distant planet who once long ago fought a battle with other monsterous aliens from afar on this remote planet where they are worshipped as gods. LOL i bet that's a surprise.
Wow! Surely quite the trip. I actually was able to pinpoint some of those "sci-fi" nuances you mention and it's a nice touch for what you're going for. Splendid job! ✨🙌
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