Lick.
The loving buzzes lick –
Like lavender lowly lit –
On a candle light wick - Lick.
Love.
What is it for?
Lady on the floor, on the bed – on the Lips –
Lungs that lovers adore – Love – what is it for?
Light.
A promise to show you the door –
A door that ought to be opened of course.
A light that slowly flickers, however, – a Lie.
Life.
The little speck of life.
A little Life that’s laughingly black.
A life that awfully lacks. A Living Lens – Cracked.
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Author:
Rocky Lagou (
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- Comment from author about the poem: Howdy! Hope you enjoy this one. This is a question for love... for life. Why? There's so much disappointment in love, and it often leads to a poor self-image. Why? Why does it almost always have to play out the same way? đĽ
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Well first off, I love the name, Hello, I adore lilacs, prefaced by my picture. I initially thought the "Lick" was from maybe a bee on the lilac but I think I'm wrong. You have officially blown my mind on how good your poetry is though. "Love, what is it for"....you'll find out someday." Life--a living lens cracked." I know when I was young (er) (ha ha) in my family home I felt this way because all we did was fight and cry. But the light you spoke of will shine!! And it won't be a lie. Hang in there! (I'm sorry I haven't done this justice but my heart was in it!)
This was actually such a precise reply. That âlickâ that I mention in the beginning could either be interpreted as a bee or a lover. I wanted to leave some space for ambiguity so itâs really nice to see you grasped that interpretation of it. It can ALSO be interpreted by the second definition of the word âbuzzâ which is: âan atmosphere of excitement and activity,â which would hint at that moment of complete admiration for a lover, or that âinfatuation.â I wanted to express this lady who is metaphorized by a lilac for the big questions and disappointments of life. Since on majority of occasions, that innocent âliving lady lilacâ will approach love with such grand expectations, but eventually see it was nothing more than âa lie.â That initial sense of âfalling in loveâ can be seen as âA promise to show you the doorâ which leads to that âlightâ I mention. However, bouncing back to the candle analogy in the beginning which represents love, that light âslowly flickers,â signaling the end of a relationship. So taking into account the huge letdown that was brought up from an unreciprocated/unfulfilling love, the lady lilac is left feeling like âa little speck of life.â Or a âliving lens - cracked,â which hints that the future in which the speaker will live, may not be perceived with the same happiness as before the first love disappointment. Thanks for your analysis. You did more than âdo the poem justiceâ you went into it with a caring mindset. Your words are truly appreciated. Have a wonderful day!
Good write R.
Thanks a bunch Orchi! Iâm so glad to see you stopped by! I hope your first love experience wasnât too bad as this little lilac. âLove. What is it for?â â¨
Erm, I forgot to add: I got no boots! lol.
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There's some boots for me! lol.
Awesome ,lilacs are talking to us today,thank you for listening to them,take care.
Yes and Yes! I hope you donât feel like I âsnatchedâ your idea. This was actually something I wrote a few days back. But I will admit your lilac poem inspired me to post this one. I really appreciate your visit and itâs always nice to bask in the delight of the natural world around us. Have a marvelous day! đ
I don't feel a snatch at all,I'm finding it so intruiging how subjects seem to be in the air at times globally.I don't mean obvious causes,more serendipitous.take care
So true though. Whatâs funny is that this isnât the first time me and another poet coincide with our posts. I think weâre all connected in an intrinsically complex way.
amen
Love it ! Super important questions for which one has to find any meaningful answers for themselves.
All a bit of a careless mysyery to the young but the middle aged begin to "see through a glass darkly" and from there on in.. good luck lol.
By the time old age creeps across your bones all this will be sussed by you. How do I know... because you're one of those who perceives the questions... so many don't give them a thought.
Hi Dusk! Itâs such a pleasure to see you enjoyed my poem on love and the loveless and the âwhys?â Itâs all so complicating and I, as a âyounglingâ who hasnât experimented with romance yet, view it as a territory that must be carefully tread. Youâre affirmations seem encouraging, however, and it is true. Those who perceive the reality and donât allow for unrealistic expectations to take control, will surely find a special someone who reciprocates the love. Youâre comment is much appreciated! Have a lovely day! đ
this is beautiful, Rocky
& it rings very true
enjoyed...Dahlia
Hi! You're so sweet! I truly appreciate your kind and warm words and you "faving" is really generous. I hope you left with a shifted perspective on love and a firmness on self. We shouldn't be slaves to toxicity and we have the ability to say "no" when we need to. Have a wonderful day!
Thank you and yes to NO toxicity, you are a wise soul, đ
An interesting poem .. good way with words .. I think there is a lot of disappointment in life , not just love .. things can just let us down I guess and really affect us emotionally
Very true, indeed. Life, sadly, will have its inescapable disappointments and hardships but I feel that if we learn to perceive these challenges in our lives than itâll be easier for us to prepare for when it comes. We just have to learn to move on from our mistakes, and focus on the future. Thanks a bunch for the comment! Itâs highly appreciated, have a good one! đ
Love, itself, is a fallacy, otherwise I'd be off with a princess. Life on the other hand, unless destined, can be achieved, through hard work, maybe a little luck on the way. Mind you, health always tops the lot in the living game.,
Exactly! Love is often misunderstood as a fantasy come alive but people need to face the reality. I totally agree with working hard in order to achieve goals in life. Thanks so much for your review! Much appreciated! Have a great day!
I enjoyed the alliteration you used throughout the poem with the roll of the "L' continually đ
It made me think of how we keep rolling through life looking for love and sensing the disappointment.
Good job.
Thanks for the comment! It's really nice to see your recognition of the heavy alliteration I incorporated in order to move the poem. It's supposed to represent that arduous journey through life and I intentionally used the word "cracked" as the last word to completely diverge from that alliteration pattern. The final word serves as that moment in our lives where we find it impossible to heal or to move on from a disappointment. So I found it fitting to hint at that with the brusque "c" in the word "cracked" to represent the "cracked-ness" the speaker is experiencing. Have a lovely day!
That's really cool! I caught the 'C' sound but I didn't realize the effect it had until you brought it up.
Well done!
A lovely write dear Rocky, the nature of love. There is always
vulnerability when you allow someone into your life. I think love is probably the most powerful, complicated and, difficult emotion we can experience. But after 52 years, I wouldn't have it any other way. Turns out, it's what you make it.
Hey! Thanks for this wise review! Love is surely quite the complex puzzle to piece. And that "vulnerability" you mention is so true; we have to be able to "risk" ourselves by having another in our life in order to see if a relationship will pay off. It's great to see your grasped the message. Have a wonderful day!
Isn't it stupid.....I fell for an entire forest just because I love the leaf?
You very well joint the dent(disappointment) of the precious idea(love) with an echo of notes(roll). The grim reality we tend to omit often. Intriguing as always.:)
Thanks kindly! Love is such a complex thing isn't it? I'm glad you at least enjoyed my take on the whole romantic scene. It can lead to some pretty huge letdowns. Have a great day!
How wonderfully you played with words dear RockyâŚ.always amazed my the ease with which you string the wordsâŚ.some advices, some satires, a bit of smirk yet posing intriguing questionsâŚ.really enjoyed itâŚ.
And simply adored every line
Yet this caught me many a times
â Light.
A promise to show you the door â
A door that ought to be opened of course.
A light that slowly flickers, however, â a Lie.â
Hello beloved Spiller! I wanted to emphasize the intricacies and complicatedness of love and romance in this piece. While all in all, weaving it together with heavy alliteration. This delves into the dissapointment of love after one has completely fallen for the other. It's nice to see you highlighted that stanza as well, as that is the turning point of the relationship; the point where the lover realizes the other deceived them into love, and has left them at a "closed door." Thanks abundantly for your words of encouragement. Have a great day!
these words are more than worthy of each & every one of my twelve reviewing predecessors comments .. and as many more who I would not be at all surprised shall eventually follow ...for tis truly splendid ............. Neville
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