Where the roses bloom
They shrivel and die too soon
Petals shed like tears
'Shrivel and die *too* soon'.. Haiku, is best served simple and elegant accessible and eloquent and this, ticks all the boxes for me.. thank you! dear Poet
Ooops! Thanks, will edit!
Would be a perfect 5-7-5 haiku if you put THEY in frony of Shrivel. Nice one ! https://www.haikusyllablecounter.com/
Miscounted that on! Will edit!
I thought that was beautiful, good job my friend!!
Thanks Raven, just fixed it!
Your welcome and I didn't see anything that needed fixin but i will check it out again
Beautiful things come in small packages, as does this poem. Being a lover of roses I find this charming.
So short but filled with so much beauty it tugs at your heart. Loved it. I can picture it so clearly, petals all around the rose bush.
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'Shrivel and die *too* soon'..
Haiku, is best served
simple and elegant
accessible and eloquent
and this, ticks all the boxes
for me..
thank you! dear Poet
Ooops! Thanks, will edit!
Would be a perfect 5-7-5 haiku if you put THEY in frony of Shrivel. Nice one ! https://www.haikusyllablecounter.com/
Miscounted that on! Will edit!
I thought that was beautiful, good job my friend!!
Thanks Raven, just fixed it!
Your welcome and I didn't see anything that needed fixin but i will check it out again
Beautiful things come in small packages, as does this poem. Being a lover of roses I find this charming.
So short but filled with so much beauty it tugs at your heart. Loved it. I can picture it so clearly, petals all around the rose bush.
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