A Few Moments After


A Few Moments After


Only a few moments

afterwards ..

When she had finally

caught up

with her breath again ..

She scratched

an upside down arch

in the sand

with her finger ..

Right next to where

only a moment

before, they had both

just been laying ..

Or maybe, 

it might have been 

the making

of a smile perhaps .. x


  • Author: Neville (Offline Offline)
  • Published: August 30th, 2022 02:45
  • Category: Unclassified
  • Views: 45
  • User favorite of this poem: MendedFences27.


  • Fay Slimm.

    Another warm glimpse into an intimate moment giving your poet's view of "afterward glow" - -- you know how to leave much unsaid but always so telling mon ami ................x

    • Neville

      thank you so very bloomin much my dear lady Fay .. I am truly honoured you should think that ........... x

    • SureshG

      Passion, so passionately scribed…..

      • Neville

        Oh' tis so good to have you back here my friend .. thank you .. Neville

      • Doggerel Dave

        Gritty stuff, Neville - wasn't the makings of a question mark unfinished, was it?

        • Neville

          ............................... well now you come to mention it .. nah, maybe not πŸ™‚

        • MendedFences27

          Is this the birthplace of erotic Emojis?
          A lot is said here with but a few words, the rest is left to the reader's humanity. The scene is minimally painted and yet piques the readers imagination. And then it ends, and the remainder is in the mind of the reader. If poetry is saying the most with the least, this is poetry at its best. - Phil A.

          • Neville

            In an age where transparency is said to be king .. it seems that you can see write through me Phil .. thank you very much my friend .. Neville

          • Bella Shepard

            To me the beauty of the poem is that a simple gesture says it all. No need for words, a silence that fills the heart. Well penned dear friend!

            • Neville

              thank you so much Bella .. they do say that beauty is in the eye of the beholder, don't they .. N

            • orchidee

              Was it πŸ™‚ or πŸ™
              The smile, that is!

              • Neville

                I am reasonably sure it was a πŸ™‚

              • Goldfinch60

                May that smile be always there Neville.


                • Neville

                  ... what a wonderful thought that is for shore & what a sight for shore eyes to behold .. but life can be a beach and things get in the waves ...................... Neville

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