You never let the rhyme fall on the first word
Too clever, is not sublime but, of all, highly absurd
There, you could see a rhyme in the middle, if you will it
Where, 'twould be a crime not to fiddle, so as to fill it
Emphasize, instead, the end of what's heard in each line
Anesthetize, I said, my friend, the first word and all will be fine
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sorenbarrett (
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I've seen a first word rhyme posted and it was quite interesting. This being the second!
Thank you crypticbard for your review and comment. Maybe it's just a matter of too much time on my hands.
Interesting soren, I'll have to give it some thought.... Nah, too much of a traditionalist to try it myself....but provided you give me warning first....
Thanks Dave the mind is a strange thing. Even though the rhyme is there it does not recognize it if it is not emphasized and even then, it just melts into the line after two to three rhymes per line. The middle two lines contain seven rhymes but you wouldn't know it. I appreciate the review my friend.
Clever write soren.
Andy
Thank you Andy I appreciate your review and kind comment
This is a rhyming junkies dream, and I stand accused. Love it, love it, love it! You have striven and so beautifully given, a piece so sublime it staggers my mind. I have to rave, cause it's such a fav!
Thank you dear Bella it soon became apparent to me that the more rhyme the less it gets noticed. It soon became apparent to me that it is where the emphasis should be that is the the rhyme's key.
Your rhyme is truly sublime!
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