Notice of absence from Doggerel Dave
Not absent - still here!
Keep Calm and Carry On Poeming. 😂
Not absent - still here!
Keep Calm and Carry On Poeming. 😂
Competition – essential component
Of an artificially constructed base,
Upon which a powerful proponent –
Ideology keeps us in our place.
However when folks are in extremis
Their true nature comes to the fore -
Aware of the importance of what is
forever our humanity at core.
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Author:
Doggerel Dave (Pseudonym) (
Offline) - Published: December 20th, 2022 05:33
- Comment from author about the poem: A response to Andy's "Why can't We Always be Like This”
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ink well spilt in my opinion 🙂
Thanks mate. And I'm not getting at Andy here - but I really would like to see more attempts at answers on these pages - easy to wax poetical about problems ........
I'm glad you didn't end it "humanity rotten to the core" , although this may be true. It speaks truth anyway you look at it. Good write.
Thanks Soren. I did tinker with one or two words in the first stanza to clarify. I hoped to make it clear that for me, the competition was the result of(dare I say it?) right wing ideology - which rests on an almost fanatical belief (real belief?) in a free market. This in reality works but rarely in the real world.
The second stanza attempts praise for what I consider to be human's true nature.
Competition is always in our lives Dave but so many take it to extremes and do not worry about the cost to others in our world.
Andy
But where does this competition come from, Andy? And Why?
Your 'Does chaos bring us together?' provides a partial answer - that is human's true nature.
I'm sure you know this really.
Humanity is the first thing to be encouraged yes and your poem is wonderful. Kudos!
Plz also read my newest poem too
Thanks for that, szk. Glad you enjoyed.
A great write Dear poet. The rhyming pattern for me, treats the subject with a powerful kid glove. The expression is forthright, honest and oh so true. At times we are as slow growing as the trees, but they have hundreds of years to grow and change, we have only one, brief lifetime by comparison in which to change our world. The last stanza puts it all in perspective, thank you.
Thanks for that Bella. I'm really glad I have the habit of revisiting my stuff, otherwise I would have missed your post - I've checked the list; I wasn't notified.
And I have a big head as a result of my read here - I'll have to let some air out, I think.
Seriously - many thanks; it's nice to feel appreciated occasionally.
I love to find gems that I haven't seen before. Life's been pretty busy lately, and I haven't been able to keep up with everyone as I would like to. I always enjoy your reads!
The poet blindly rhymes with no meaning,
He thinks rhyming the last word is poetry,
He must get out of the poem writing job,
Mustn't confuse other poets to spoil them,
Better he first read the poems of everyone,
And learn from them the way to write poems?
These eight lines deserve to enter trash,
He has no imagination to coin wise poems,
He is wasting his lifetime meaninglessly,
Very pathetic to see such a foolish poet,
I am sorry to see such a bad poet here,
He deserves the title, "Worst Poet" surely?
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Wonderful poem,
thoughts and
message penned!! 👍
Great rhyme pattern,
last stanza says
it all my friend! 😄
Best regards ✌️ Thad
Thanks for visiting one more of my, i thought, long buried rants, Thad. I enjoyed doing it.
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