You are far more intelligent than me
Surely you see that your very view is your end
Forever frozen in the rigidity of self righteousness
A narrow myopic view, you see as visionary
In your infinite wisdom the universe becomes invisible
Can your Newtonian perspective of the infinite
Predict the Quantum mechanics of emotion
Are you unable to see that both may be true
In this binary view
Is it possible that your inner insecurities
Are projected, turning love to hate
And your caring to blame
Can you see that we are all imprisoned
In our own solitary confinement
Where any visitations are transient
And escape is punishable
By summary execution
Can you not see the entropy of your end
Locked in a false algorithm
Toward a set purpose of implosion
Where all choices lead to isolation, suspicion and rage
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We often get into a mental rut when it comes to ourselves and we are none the wiser. It is said that there is wisdom in listening to outside opinions for consideration. An awesome way to start the mind this new year. Thanks Soren.
Thank you Cryptic it is always good to hear from you. Thank you for the review and kind words
Your words speak of what I see too often in the world these days. Pride in rigidity, unwillingness to listen and rejection of truth when it challenges preconceived ideas. I suppose only time will tell if we can somehow bridge the gaps, chasms that we are creating in our society. Thank your for this deeply insightful write dear friend. Keep us thinking!
Thank you dear Bella, I appreciate your encouraging words
Such true words soren and very well written.
Andy
Thank you Andy a happy New year to you.
such a thorough and in-depth, overview commentary
of our societal
issues and wasted potential
a great write!
forgive me dear Poet
I read your words and just began to type another instinctive reply
thank you for inspiring me yet again
(In striving to split atom's
into bitesize certainties
we negated, to decipher
and cherish, those traits
that allowed us to evolve
from cave dweller's
to modernity's
high-rise buildings and aspirations...
our evolutionary progress
need not necessitate, we eliminate
all that we've accumulated, to date
why not write algorithm's
that perpetuate those finer traits
and virtues of our human race
why must we only utilise them
for a binary limited, profiteering
capitalist perspective
we, write the software
so let us free ourselves from
programming code, dependant
on boom n bust
'if' loops
invest, in a greater scope
for our societal hopes
anchored upon our intuitive kindness'
evolutionary, civility
why not live like we dream
striving for that infinitely, greater
than settling
for the ease of that hollow, better...)
A visionary response in poetic style. It is this type of response that makes your comments unique and they are deeply appreciated. Thank you again for the review L.B.
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