Will you offer a helpful hand to a stranger?
Will you risk yourself for someone in danger?
Will you take from your mouth to give to someone in need?
Or will you pretend you don't see, because of greed?
Would you give your life for that of another?
Does it matter if you know him, or if he's your brother?
If you would, would you do it for the recognition?
Or would you do it out of fear of perdition?
Maybe for expected pay in the life above
Or would you do it simply out of love?
Would you hear the pleading of a baby bird fallen?
Are you too busy to hear a fly in distress callin?
Why then should you expect help, when you're in need of reliance?
We're all the same, if you believe in God or science
Until we want to give to the weak and poor
We will forever and always be at war
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I really liked this poem. A lot of my poetry rhymes also and tries to remain simple but thoughtful and hopefully wise. I think you need to further explore the ideas expressed here. Do you think there is hope for us? The cause of war that is near the end of the poem is a powerful statement.The struggle to be a "winner" and the inclination to fight are, I think, like you indicate are very closely related. Very good and thoughtful work.
Thank you for taking the time to review this piece and for your gracious and welcome comments. I have a tendency to say too much in a poem so I have restricted extrapolating on these other themes for other poems. But you are right there are many questions here that need further exploration. I think the major issue here was where do we draw the line in caring? Do we draw the circle tightly around ourself, or family, or friends or even humanity. All living things deserve respect. Thanks again
This poem strikes at the heart of who we are as human beings. The question you pose is one of self sacrifice, a question we would so often rather not have to answer. Each time we refuse, or look the other way we are diminished as a whole, and as your eloquent words say "we will forever and always be at war". It is a fav, for we need constant reminding of what we could and should be. I find this a very powerful write dear friend.
Bella I thank you for your review and most gracious comments. Yes it struck me that we have a way of drawing the line at where we are willing to sacrifice. I hope people will reflect on how it is that they make that decision as to who or what is worthy or our help.
Good words soren and so very true.
Andy
Thank you Andy for the read and kind words
(worse yet, we've devolved
even further
now we're waging activist wars
over ideologies
as spineless in worth, as a gust of wind
where you see the same faces
on either side of the picket fences
depending on that herd mentality's
@# trending, majority...)
'Or would you do it simply out of love?
Would you hear the pleading of a baby bird fallen?
Are you too busy to hear a fly in distress callin?'
these questions are so indicative
of our society devolving
into a cesspool of indifference...
again, dear Poet
a great read, and a much needed message!
I read and will try to heed
thank you
Thank you, L.B. for your read and most insightful words. I see the social distancing that has taken place in my lifetime and long for a time when people knew each other and cared about there fellow man and other creatures. Maybe this is just delusional on my part, and maybe people never did, but it felt like they did now it does not.
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