She Had a Thing About Blue Eyes
she was a poem broken ..
punctuated
only by a series of subtle
pauses
and a steady flow of lies ..
she was known
to argue with echoes ..
find fault
with perfection
and frown upon sorrow ..
but make love
with a hunger and passion
she reserved
only for men, with blue eyes ..
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Author:
Neville (
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If she pops round to see me, I will swoon. I'm a blue eyed boy, ya know! lol. Will she know I am, if I wear shades?!
if you wear a monocle she might, but I bet she's neva seen a polecat wearing one of those before so she may find it a turn on Steven 🙂
An outstanding write -- your short-line technique of presenting intrigue in a few short lines is amazing - -this has to be one of your best and is now in my fave. list Sir N.............x
I am both honoured and humbled ma'am .. to be sure, tis just like being knighted .. 🌹x
Ha ha - - then arise Sir Neville and scribe me some more of your bounteous offerings.................x
this is so descriptive. I just love it! I don't often favorite things but this is such a fine poem! You had me at the very beginning....blue eyes!
thank you kindly & bluely 🙂
Ohh, I don't care! I'm gonna meet her, or one of your other lasses. Makes a break from KP - who I never see 99% of the time anyway. Well, not in person. On TV, in the papers, in jail (oops, she got away with something yet again) - yes!
I paid the jailer the bail money to keep her IN. heehee.
Such smooth poetry, beautifully formed.....but why make a thing of wonder out of blatant discrimination?🙂
(The remainder of her idiosyncrasies I intend to ignore within the frame of this discussion).
that'll do nicely sir & you, are of course, well within your rights 🙂
I hope your eyes are blue Neville.
Andy
they are indeed sir 🙂
'she
was a poem
broken'
I'm sorry, but this line by itself
is a complete poem
what arrangement of wording
so many of us wannabees
would have rushed it as 'broken poem'
and render it a meaningless line...
as-ever, dear Poet supreme
I so gratefully, read and learn
thank you! Hyung
(oh and yes, I read the whole
of this wonderfully poignant poem
lol)
You got me smiling all over again brother Mek .. well not all over .. all over my face tis true but .. 🙂
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