The earth breaths, it shakes, and heaves
Its belly sinks, breaks, and shrinks
Its chest lifts, falls, and shifts
It can spring, it crawls, a living thing
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sorenbarrett (
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I think you've got that, Soren - an earthquake must be must be one of the most discombobulating of experiences - might even be the origin of that slightly overblown word......
Thanks Dave for the read and comment. Just heard of the one today and after watching the pictures this popped out.
Earth quakes are scary… but you make it sound like a natural calm process. Great poem
Earthquakes, hurricanes, floods, and fires all natural processes, I've been through them all but none are so scary as man himself. Thanks for the read and the comment.
Good words soren. Such power in our world.
Andy
Thanks for the read Andy. Nature is always more powerful than us, despite our arrogance.
A dramatic write S.
Thank you orchidee, I saw images on the news of people without homes, in the cold, dirty with no place to go, hungry and I remembered disasters I and my family have been through, when my children were young and hungry and I had nothing to give them.
the s sounds to your rhyme
mimic the crawl of a snake
if you read this out loud
which seamlessly highlights
impact of your very last words
'...a living thing'
(a subtle touch, really well thought-out
a great read, dear Poet)
L.B. you are much more perceptive than I. I have to admit that this was unintentional but I see your point and credit it to just the sound that seemed to work as I wrote it. You never cease to amaze me. Thank you so much for the read and pointing this out.
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