Man you really rocked my scales
When you died
The blasts of wind
That blew over your passing
Teetered the fortress of the past
Like a microburst storm
Mortar rearranged itself
And windows flew
All I could do
Was put my head in my hands
Watch the destruction
Wait it out
Some of the damage
I fear
Will be permanent
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Author:
Lorna (
Offline) - Published: April 5th, 2023 03:43
- Category: Love
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Comments6
It is a powerful and evocative poem that captures the emotional and physical impact of loss. The vivid imagery and striking language create a sense of chaos and upheaval that is both unsettling and poignant.
Glad you liked it M............
this made me wince .. and truly
a loss so great is undeniably devastating ..
I can almost feel it for myself though these few words you have so adeptly pinned here ..
Yes.... my desire was to pierce you through the heart........ lol...........
you succeeded 🖤
I remember feeling this same way when my dad died 15 months ago. I hope as with me, your hurt heals with time. Well conveyed write Lorna. 🌹
A poignant write Lorna.
Such a loss can be devastating, like the world will never be the same again, but time will rebuild the world as you know it
A heart-wrenching poem, well written and expressed. - Phil A.
Such a loss can be hard to bear, I know that when my wife died but there will come a time, as it has for me, when love will rise once more Lorna.
Very good emotive words.
Andy
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