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So I've been trying to write a story,
But it turned into a song
There's no villain
No Hero's Glory
In this tale they don't belong
No dramatic pause
No twists. No turns
No lessons to be learned
But Now I sing ,my writings blurry cuz of crying all night long
I’ve been Trying to write this story, But now, it turned into a song.
A Mythical End , I’m sure ,
already you surmise, cue nary a violin to announce cliche’
No mystery here and no surprise
The Next Words I spoke
Darkened The Day
Wrenching Destiny ,a twisted choke
She Vowed to Leave
She got her way
But Wait, There is a villain in this story
Complete with lyrics that don’t belong
I’ll Invent a Hero with fabled glory, Ignore the facts , nobody wants to hear my Song
Print the legend , Grab a pen, then I’ll Turn the tune into the story !
Bobby O
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Author:
Bobby O (
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- Published: May 3rd, 2023 21:48
- Comment from author about the poem: Another version w an ending that doesn’t visit the Esoteric style of the last approach.
- Category: Reflection
- Views: 7
Comments2
This is a good demonstration of why songs are instinctual and stories are more innate-the songs are so automatic and don’t require all the elements you mentioned-yet we complicate things-this piece was intellectually stimulating and thank you for that-
Thanks. Wondering how the other version hits you. It’s more exoteric and it’s the version o prefer. Your comment is gracious and much appreciated.
I noticed the comment part but don’t seem to find the other version
MISSED TAKES 1st version
So I've been trying to write a story,
But it turned into a song
There's no villain
No Hero's Glory
In this tale they don't belong
No dramatic pause
No twists. No turns
No lessons to be
learned
But I have to sing cuz my writings blurry cuz
I've been crying all night long
Trying to write this story, and it turned into a song.
Surely, The plot already you surmise, cue nary a violin to announce cliche’
No mystery here and no surprise
I spoke those words, the ones I’d sworn I’d never say
It didn’t twist , It didn’t turn , no lesson learned , She got her way
So I was wrong , There is a villain in this story
Complete with lyrics that don’t belong
Writing not of Heroes Glory
At Least I turned it all , into a song
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