Happenings
Gazing through shade to sunlit green
I see sycamore's golden-glint shades
lose a few leaves in fate's wind-bated
spin to begin disintegration, weaving
anew destiny's shape-changing azure.
Protective twigs hide young nestlings
until predator visit with frightful haste
when silence breaks in deathly unrest
as hawk struggles with live chick-food
and I have to watch indifferent nature.
Riddled with questions as each day
repeats happenings forecast to end
breath that hatched fed and rooted
a next tomorrow will crumble away
produces, in me saddened scruples.
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Author:
Fay Slimm. (
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“And I have to watch indifferent nature”.
Certainly to describe an unmerciful self surviving by eking out every tiny advantage settled upon a genus over billions of years and though new strengthening armor arrives rare it’s also predictable cuz of billions and billions chances to set upon fruitful happenstance It is incapable of mercy which is feral and unattractive and yet the dichotomy actually is the entry we call most beautiful. Now I just took a dozen lines and dozens of words to say what you said in one line. My exaggerations illuminate your skill. It’s a cool style and I like it.
A delightful read Bobby of your take on "indifferent nature" and so honoured that you felt my style pleased your taste - -- thanking you muchly for this generous review.
The form of this little piece reinforces the density of its subject. Your constantly creative use of words and phrases and pieces of words and unique structures makes the reader linger to "figure it out" so she doesn't miss anything. Moving and curious.
The piece was written after seeing the stealing of chicks which led to the thoughts on indifferent nature when raw things happen -
Great that you found the read moving and curious - - thank you Jarcher for stopping by and reviewing the verse.
This 'happens' to be a good write Fay!
Thank you Orchi.
sadly, its a beautiful jungle out there deliciously depicted in here .. x
You are ace at supporting my efforts at penning the jungle of Nature and thanking you dearly for your read and review........x
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