If I were a sheep, for my wool would I weep?
If I were an ox, would they put me in a box?
If I were a bee, would they steal my honey?
If I were a hen, would they take my children?
If I were a fish, would I be put on a dish?
If I were a fruit tree, would they take my progeny?
If I were a goat, would they slit my throat?
If I were a grain, would they cut off my head again?
If I were a rat, would they send a cat?
If I were a dog, would they me flog?
If I were an insect, would they me dissect?
If I were a deer, would they put a bullet in my ear?
If I were a man, I would think that I can
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Dude, not like your usual stellar write. It’s just sorta arbitrary rhyme , like any old rhyme would do. It doesn’t build tension or purpose or bring any group through phrase together to enrich. An ox in a box a fish on a dish, they be flog a dog, how did you miss a frog on a log or a bison fighting Tyson or make a Siamese say please … whenever there’s a million easy thing to grab without thinking or just to fill a line, well maybe that’s a project to skip. Dude, I say this w love and out of respect for the multiple pieces that were great to read. Don’t be mad. If and when I stray from standard I hope you call me out.
Bobby I thank you for your criticisms, they are helpful. This one was just a filler while I was working on something else. The one I intended for today was giving me a little trouble and so I just through in a random thought. Sorry to take your time with this one but I had set myself a goal of a poem every other day and this came out as a rant. Hope the next one is better.
I get it. I’m not proliferate enough to get one in each day. Sometimes I get locked and stare and stay confused.
Rhyme haven that brings on the smile!
Thanks Cryptic one of those things that start with a nonsense thought and just keep going. When your working on one thing and something else pops into your head.
Great ending, I think?
Thanks 2781. Yes it depends on who you are. Just a little silly nonsense that developed into a pet rant of mine. People feel entitled and seldom gateful.
Worthy rant!
...change!
and so I do, try
increments at a time
like finding out, what a horrid practise
is used to produce our milk
and so now, I'm almost total soya
does it impact anything, no
does it make a difference
to my mind and spirit's, balance
n health
YES!
should everyone do it, hell no..
do we need to butcher
and stunt a calves life, for that veal
decadence.. no
then again, do I have a right
to oppress another's way of life
because of my moral compass?
hell no
should we write and help widen
the awareness of those
less informed of our food culture
absurdities
Yes, Yes, Yes!
(what a brilliant utilisation
of your poetic talent, my friend
an important write, ever timely)
thank you!
(and don't waste your time
on ill-informed critiques
sprouting, reactionary
unconsidered, self centred garbage
just do you
no apologies, we're lucky to have you
if you listen their bul sht
they'll exhast your relatiosnhip with Poesy
which is the intent if their toxic comment
you know, because
only 'they' know what poetry should be
since you know, everything
they write is a gift to humanity...
pffft
fckin morons!
do you brother
fck anyone's blinkered 'opinion'..
don't try to be nice, to malice
'reflect', that you receive
with double the potency!)
Dear L.B. I thank you whole heartedly for your most kind words and encouragement. I write for myself and have a rather thick skin. I do appreciate constructive criticism and realize that some poems are better than others. I judge poems on two axis, one structure and beauty of form and rhyme, the other of impact and emotion. This one I realize is lacking in structure and beauty but does have a message. Don't worry about me becomming discouraged by criticism, I write for my self as well as others and know that each piece is not a masterpiece. I have writteen only a handful of poems that I am truely proud of, But that is not the point. I write because I have something inside that I have to let out. I so value your support dear friend.
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