MEASURE TWICE
This Poem segues toward a Star Trek theme,beginning with happenstance unforeseen. Some strangers in proximity near ,their whispered voices caught my ear. Each furtive glance shows slivered beady eyes, as I read his lips and heard the word demise. A Diabolical plot ? The language of their bodies a suspicious half way turn fed my concern , must not stop, like Barney Fife undercover, covertly Easedrop. But maybe drop the ease from that word portmanteau. Would Barney mention the tension , admit his perspiring glow? Were Andy in charge, or Captains Kirk or Picard, they wouldn’t have missed all those words in a row , no easy drop It’s ridiculously hard. Now it’s time to admit they said The size not demise , planning for wife’s birthday party surprise. Blame paranoia or old age, no mission did ever exist , time for professional help, truncate conspiracy, first on the list. My new mission statement , adjusted from Star Treks famous lore “to boldly never go where Bobby O has gone before”
Bobby O
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Bobby O (
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- Comment from author about the poem: Self depricating keeps me earthbound by balancing the constant array of compliments showered upon me by an assortment of beautiful women.
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Glad someone's getting compliments from beautiful women. I get 'em from ugly women, and run a mile! heehee . Did I make that up?!
Did I?
Oh, you making it up too, as you go along?! lol.
I told a guy' You'll be OK with me - I'm selling £5 notes for £6 each. Seems OK to me! heehee. (adjust currency to dollars where you are).
Would you feel more comfortable if I used words like BLOKE or Mate and Hooligan or BUMPERSHOOT ?
Nope. Attach some meaning to the cliches if you’re gonna use them. Just to say “happenstance unforeseen” without taking an extra thirty seconds to bring to life s real visual. Happenstance unforeseen is just lazy.
Do you see how rude your comment on my poem is when it's reflected back with your own work? Get a life.
That’s small of you and cowardly disingenuous I made points meant to offer thoughts to assist and if you open your mind thry will aid snd you will realize my words were born of best intention. You just shit the bed like a baby instead.
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