Note

peto

Simmering her heart began to boil

Punishment for remaining loyal 

To hopes and dreams formed in a moonlit glow

He'd charmed the birds out of the trees 

Defenceless she fell to her knees

In awe of the bravado put on show

One look into that twinkling eye

Had reservations wave goodbye 

Collapsing falling harder than the rain 

Strong arms reached out breaking her fall 

He played Ken to her barbie doll 

The lightning strike electrified her brain 

The honeymoon was oh so grand 

Like kids let loose in Disneyland 

She tasted heaven every time they kissed 

He stripped her trust her skin her bone 

The pictures in his unlocked phone 

Engulfed her every fibre in red mist

Initial anger turned to shock

She tore at his first gift a frock

A silent scream was ripping at her throat 

She pours a drink while counting pills 

Neglecting her survival skills 

She scribbles the first sentence of a note

  • Author: peto (Offline Offline)
  • Published: June 29th, 2023 08:26
  • Category: Unclassified
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  • Caring dove

    Some strong words in this .. so much anger and sadness


    ‘ Engulfed her every fibre in red mist
    Initial anger turned to shock’


    A good poem .. tho sad .

    Some people let us down and cause a lot of pain

    • peto

      Thank you Violet
      Yea
      Don't always play out how we would like
      Truly appreciate your time

    • LIZ

      Betrayal...."The pictures in his unlocked phone, Engulfed her every fibre in red mist, Initial anger turned to shock". Strong emotions! Thank you for sharing!

      • peto

        And thank you for reading
        Very much appreciate the visit
        Cheers

      • Christina8

        "she pours a drink while counting pills"....Such a dark turn after looking in his phone...I'd like to read that note....Another brilliant poem from my fav. poet!!

        • peto

          What a lovely comment
          Thank you Christina
          Truly humbled by your kindness

        • Bobby O

          You , my friend, have a style that is at a real nice level. This is a power pice and I like how you are consistent with driving fir a certain movement in your work without the cliche’ often seen in this site. Head and shoulders above most displaying a dedication to the art. You don’t “ mail stuff in” many props

        • Bobby O

          P.S. I can’t imagine what she scribbled and that aspect of keeping tension and mystery engulfs readers.

          • peto

            Thanks very much Bobby
            Very encouraging and pleasant comment to read
            Very much obliged

          • Garth Rakumakoe

            Intense and gripingly real with imagery. The metaphors are strong. An attractive work of craft. I'm loving your writing Peto. An absolute favorite this one!

            • peto

              Garth
              I truly appreciate such support
              Extremely grateful for such words
              Many thanks

            • peto

              Should that so read 2?
              We all do what we think is right
              Triumphs as well as mistakes are part of life
              Thank you Maxine
              A lovely comment
              Much appreciated



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