THE NASCAR LOOP
Left turn, left turn 4 straight times,
I'm on an oval with no finish line.
Unanswered questions racing thru my mind, u drove away and took love's exit sign, and left me behind with left turn, left turn 4 more times.
No one goes thru life without making mistakes, You put your pride aside and face the trouble you make. When you hold someone's heart you hold life's highest stakes. Then you treat me like a pitstop, my emotions ain't fake.
Like the myth of Sisyphus and his uncompleatable task, love moved slowly up the mountain but fell real fast, now I'm caught in the Minataur's maze doomed to retrace the past, to escape the unescapable is all that i ask. Love once invincible, unbreakable, now shattered like glass.
Cuz these left turns are a bad design, let's take a right turn to the finish line. The only oval would be a diamond with brilliant shine. We'd ride away together, and leave the Left Turns behind.
Bobby O
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Bobby O (
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Each line made me want to keep reading, meaningful poetry with a good flow is always the best..
That’s really nice for you to say. I tried to sell it as a song to the Fugees . They sent me a pamphlet for a cruise.
They missed out!
Bobby pitstop
Think i know your sis Penelope
Great last verse stopped me going in circles
Magic magic 4 straight times
My sis not of that moniker.
The piece was written to emote a certain frustration. Worst thing about it was in the very day I told my friends that she and I hit a cool stride and I was confident it was gonna last. Less than an hour later she arrives at the party and I move to hug her and she extends her arms to create distanc and says “I don’t wanna do this anymore” Then she just leaves and I never found out why.
Left turn left turn left turn left turn
Sorry
Was joking Penelope pitstop is a cartoon character in the uk
Oh the frustration came through
Talented writer
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There is so much here!
Have you ever been to the Indianapolis 500? It's an annual automobile race held at Indianapolis Motor Speedway, in Indiana. Your poem made me think of it. You're basically looking at race cars going around! Same destination each time! The cars only stop for maintenance.
"Then you treat me like a pitstop, my emotions ain't fake". Broken heart?
Like the myth of Sisyphus; wow! Basically, all the slow work thrown back at your face! Going in circles, reaching the same results, but wanting to change direction in order to arrive at true love's destination. Fear....and hope!
Thank you for sharing!
Ok. Indy and Nascar bore and bore me and my frustration builds , The piece was written to emote a certain frustration. Worst thing about it was in the very day I told my friends that she and I hit a cool stride and I was confident it was gonna last. Less than an hour later she arrives at the party and I move to hug her and she extends her arms to create distanc and says “I don’t wanna do this anymore” Then she just leaves and Ii never found out why. When I saw a rave at a friend
Left turn left turn left turn left turn
Harsh! What's more frustrating than going around in circles to end up in the same place? Especially, when expectations were high!
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a compelling read from beginning to end sir O ... N
Much appreciated
I love it when coincidence of separate unrelated behavior coincides serendipitously with a review Like it beats all kinda Vegas odds that on the list I was making this morning of my ten favorite words that the seventh word was
ENTICING
I love it when coincidence of separate unrelated behavior coincides serendipitously with a review Like it beats all kinda Vegas odds that on the list I was making this morning of my ten favorite words that the seventh word was
ENTICING
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