When One is No Longer

Neville

When One is No Longer

 

When I think of you

as indeed, I do often ..

You feel

so very much alive ..

But then,

you are no longer ..

And so,

when I try to think

of you harder ..

As indeed, I so want

to do ..

You are no more

the carefree

young woman, I once

used to know ..

But rather the ghost

of all those

women I have ever wanted ..

  • Author: Neville (Offline Offline)
  • Published: July 4th, 2023 00:38
  • Comment from author about the poem: when truth matters more than the love it leaves behind .. please dont be gentle with me ..
  • Category: Unclassified
  • Views: 33
  • Users favorite of this poem: Jerry Reynolds, Garth Rakumakoe
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  • Caring dove

    the ghost
    of all those
    women I have ever wanted .‘

    Those are really sad lines ..

    Sad writing but well expressed

    • Neville



      I am glad you noticed the sadness I attempted to thread throughout .. many thanks Violet b (used to be yellow rose) .. You are a ⭐.. Neville

      • Caring dove

        Yes , I did .. and it’s never nice or easy to feel so much sadness ( wherever it might be coming from )

        Your welcome )

      • Parisab

        I found the iteration of the word indeed very interesting in this piece-There is depth to the content in the simple and ‘care free’ wording-we do detach to survive the grief from loss-also the idol worshiping of humans, especially a woman, will lose their luster as the last seven lines eluded and we can become disengaged from the feelings we once had for the person-you are mastering the enigma of this piece-Of course I am commenting the implicit meaning-appealing work as always poet friend…

        • Neville



          wow .. what a well reasoned and in depth gift you have left for me this mane my friend .. thank you ever so muchly and kindly .. Neville 🌷

        • Goldfinch60

          One day that ghost may be with you in reality Neville and all will be wonderful.

          Andy

          • Neville



            bloomin hope so Andy .. your optimism reinforces my own belief .. Neville

          • 2781

            I avoid to dream
            Of what might have been.

            • Neville



              if you can do that I applaud you

              • 2781

                It's a challenge!

              • orchidee

                Good write Neville. KP said to me ages ago 'You can no longer sing', but I carry on warbling regardless! lol.

                • Neville



                  Oh' is that what it is Mr. O ...🐭

                • orchidee

                  I of course am un-cultured to give such a well reasoned and in depth comment as is above! lol.

                  • Neville



                    I dunno, maybe you are just, or simply write 🐭..🐧))

                  • Christina8

                    Wonderfully written...one day I think you will find yourself at peace with that "ghost" and you will be together again....C

                    • Neville



                      what an absolutely delightful thought .. many thanks C ... N 🙂

                    • Teddy.15

                      Beautiful dear Neville 💐 ❤️

                      • Neville


                        thank you dear Teddy 🙂 ❤️

                      • Jerry Reynolds

                        Great write Neville.

                        • Neville


                          thank you so much Jez ..

                        • Bella Shepard

                          I read this poem aloud several times, and each time the sense of yearning became more palpable. Beautifully expressed and lovingly written dear friend.

                          • Neville



                            I am so glad you were passing Bella, what an honour you have bestowed upon both me and my latest little scribble .. I can hardly thank you enough my friend ... Neville

                          • Garth Rakumakoe

                            This poems literally turns inside out in meaning and metaphor. A brilliant piece of work, Neville.

                            • Neville



                              way too kind Garth but I aint complaining kind sir .. many thanks indeed 🙂

                            • L. B. Mek

                              immersed in our woes and laments
                              we even manage to make the hurt
                              we dish out, all bout us...
                              fallible, cursed to view the world
                              through our biased eyes
                              and yet, some of us still struggle
                              to find a line
                              between what, we could have been
                              and what we may yet, become
                              thus, as hard as it may be
                              we peel back those duck-tapes
                              barricading our past mistakes
                              and boldly, excavate
                              the lessons we've learnt, insuring
                              we're accountable
                              for the broken heart's we've left
                              in our wake

                              • Neville



                                thanks for checking in brother Mek .. N



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