She asked him if he had a light
I have he said to her delight
And reached into his pocket for the flame
Her strangely dyed unnatural hair
Warned any bold enough to dare
To ask her for her number or her name
She gave his arm a thankful stroke
Then bounced a little as she spoke
I've asked six others none could help me out
My bus is overdue I'm late
I'm not quite sure how long he'll wait
Forever going by that bone jangling pout
The horror he tried to disguise
By closing up his tell tale eyes
Was felt by every soul for miles around
His hands had done the rounds to find
An emptiness that filled his mind
The promised spark was nowhere to be found
He turns on heels to walk away
The echo from her it's ok
Left every nerve end screaming for a guide
His saving grace a local shop
The standard goods for readies swap
She had a smoke while waiting for her ride
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Author:
peto (
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This is such a descriptive poem, you did an amazing job on this!! I liked it a lot, keep on writing!!!
Thanks very much Christina
Encouraging supportive and a great lady
As for keep writing
I will if you will
Appreciate you more than you know
She sounds a bit scary .. and not very nice .. a good and engaging writing sometimes it’s best to walk away from certain people
I didn't put this across this very well
She wasn't scary
Chance encounter as I passed a bus stop
Thanks for checking it out and your interpretation
Much appreciated
Yeah maybe I read it in the wrong way I guess everyone interprets things differently sometimes
That’s ok ))
Definitely ok Charlotte
Interesting for me to see
I think it was just certain words , maybe the word ‘ horror and screaming which maybe made me think he felt scared ..
But yes I still like your poem )
I once asked for a light to a guy who instantly fell in love with one of my girly friends I was with in a night club and they've been married 20 years.. a very poetic write dear Peto ❤️
Lovely
So you are a legit match maker
Thank you Teddy
Very encouraging very grateful to you
Maybe I lit a fire 🔥 lol
Please tell me it was a match not a lighter
It was a lighter but who cares my ex smoking habit brought a family together 😂 you reminded me of some wonderful times 💋
There's something about the beautiful rhyming scheme of this poem that I love, especially when I read aloud. A chance meeting that provided such wonderful inspiration. Such a good write dear poet!
What a lovely thing to say
I really appreciate it Bella
Many thanks
Nice write and rhyme.
To be a 'light' for another.. metaphorically or otherwise..
I particularly liked
'His hands had done the rounds to find
An emptiness that filled his mind'
Great work!!
Thank you very much
And for picking out that line
Grateful and ever
Much obliged
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