Crashing waves hit the rocky cliffs nearby
As salty wind passes through my hair.
The gulls have relocated for the time being
leaving me with my thoughts.
I bring my knees to my chest
Dragging sand with my movements.
I can sense it getting in every crevice
every nook that it isn't allowed in.
This is why I don’t like the beach.
I can’t control the particles beneath me,
But I can control my thoughts,
and so I make them happy.
- Author: M.E.M. ( Offline)
- Published: August 25th, 2023 10:51
- Comment from author about the poem: It’s been a while. This is the prompt I used to come up with this poem: Create a poem set on an empty beach, where you are left at peace with your thoughts. Created: 8/25/23 Comments are always welcome!
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Comments3
Very descriptive in the way you let ‘your sandy thoughts’ run its court ‘and made them happy’ I always liked those prompts for such ‘describe a place’ poems-I also saw the imagery of your body becoming the cliff and the sands becoming the waves- it fit into the background composition-thanks for sharing…
Thank you so much for the feedback!
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Sandy Thoughts
Crashing waves hit the rocky cliffs nearby
As salty wind passes through my hair.
The gulls have relocated for the time being
leaving me with my thoughts.
I bring my knees to my chest
Dragging sand with my movements.
I can sense it getting in every crevice
every nook that it isn't allowed in.
This is why I don’t like the beach.
I can’t control the particles beneath me,
But I can control my thoughts,
and so I make them happy.
Thank you - yes it did.
Rewarding read. You certainly made good use of that prompt. The sand - yes I know it's discomfort myself, and I'll try to confine those images to my own experience rather than dwell too long on yours...................
A special person if you can control your thoughts - please keep that skill in good working order.
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