With the new year one hour and ten minutes old
Bold as brass met his match with the purest of gold
Put her hand at her back so that he could take hold
Of perfection in every way
His sweet nothings had moved up a notch in her ear
Then she smiled as the fog in his head became clear
The first kiss saw the world and his dog disappear
Momentarily light years away
It was virginal pure radiance in her eyes
Butterflies took control fireworks filled the skies
He proposed there and then and much to his surprise
She agreed they should soon name the day
Throwing open the curtains in her family house
With the tigress disguised as the timidous mouse
Guests and family supped Smirnoff and downed the odd grouse
Arguing over what vinyl to play
A heart knowing no bounds satisfies every need
Cut her open it's nothing but love she would bleed
Her abundance snatched at by his unnatural greed
The first sign of victim and prey
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OMG you continue to surprise me with your words and rhyme and story twists! I thought it was gonna be happily ever after and it ends with "victim and prey" i mean, this is so good, it got me! Your talent knows no bounds, sir!
You give me too much credit Christina
I never know where I'm going when I start
extremely grateful as always
Many thanks
Absolutely my pleasure, Stevie! I look forward to reading your rhymes each day!
Great piece my friend, I hope that this day comes true for you both!!
Much obliged blessed
Truly appreciate your time
Many thanks
Such an intriguing poem, I toyed with the question of who really ends up being victim or prey. Throwing open the curtains, is she revealing something that was concealed? Her abundance snatched at by his unnatural greed, her innocence? A romantic mystery of the first order.
This was meant to be just after the bells welcomed in a new year
In Scotland it is traditional to go first footing
Visiting neighbours etc
The couple were behind the curtains in her parents house watching the fireworks
When they emerged the family and friends were all still in party mode
He definitely snatched at her innocence
After charming her
Thank you very much for such 8interest Bella
I truly appreciate it
I like your version far better. What a delightful tradition.
You certainly have a way with words and your writing is so captivating! Seems like the charming and wooing of a vampire on unsuspecting prey.
The variety in your writing is so refreshing.
Great write!
Thank you very much sage
That is a great way to sum it up
Gives it a supernatural vibe
Truly appreciate your input
Extremely grateful
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