First

peto

With the new year one hour and ten minutes old 

Bold as brass met his match with the purest of gold 

Put her hand at her back so that he could take hold

Of perfection in every way 

 

His sweet nothings had moved up a notch in her ear

Then she smiled as the fog in his head became clear 

The first kiss saw the world and his dog disappear

Momentarily light years away 

 

It was virginal pure radiance in her eyes 

Butterflies took control fireworks filled the skies 

He proposed there and then and much to his surprise 

She agreed they should soon name the day 

 

Throwing open the curtains in her family house 

With the tigress disguised as the timidous mouse 

Guests and family supped Smirnoff and downed the odd grouse 

Arguing over what vinyl to play 

 

A heart knowing no bounds satisfies every need 

Cut her open it's nothing but love she would bleed 

Her abundance snatched at by his unnatural greed 

The first sign of victim and prey

  • Author: peto (Offline Offline)
  • Published: September 30th, 2023 05:48
  • Category: Unclassified
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  • Christina8

    OMG you continue to surprise me with your words and rhyme and story twists! I thought it was gonna be happily ever after and it ends with "victim and prey" i mean, this is so good, it got me! Your talent knows no bounds, sir!

  • peto

    You give me too much credit Christina
    I never know where I'm going when I start
    extremely grateful as always
    Many thanks

    • Christina8

      Absolutely my pleasure, Stevie! I look forward to reading your rhymes each day!

    • BlessedbyGod

      Great piece my friend, I hope that this day comes true for you both!!

      • peto

        Much obliged blessed
        Truly appreciate your time
        Many thanks

      • Bella Shepard

        Such an intriguing poem, I toyed with the question of who really ends up being victim or prey. Throwing open the curtains, is she revealing something that was concealed? Her abundance snatched at by his unnatural greed, her innocence? A romantic mystery of the first order.

        • peto

          This was meant to be just after the bells welcomed in a new year
          In Scotland it is traditional to go first footing
          Visiting neighbours etc
          The couple were behind the curtains in her parents house watching the fireworks
          When they emerged the family and friends were all still in party mode
          He definitely snatched at her innocence
          After charming her
          Thank you very much for such 8interest Bella
          I truly appreciate it

          • Bella Shepard

            I like your version far better. What a delightful tradition.

          • Introverted Sage

            You certainly have a way with words and your writing is so captivating! Seems like the charming and wooing of a vampire on unsuspecting prey.
            The variety in your writing is so refreshing.
            Great write!

            • peto

              Thank you very much sage
              That is a great way to sum it up
              Gives it a supernatural vibe
              Truly appreciate your input
              Extremely grateful



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