Suburban Sunflower
The moment that she bit
deep into her
ripe city peach like that ..
Was the very
same moment, he closed
both his eyes
and imagined handfuls of
apricots and a
single suburban sunflower ..
It was also
then that he realised it was
raining, he was
no longer starving, but yet
still hungry
for a small portion of her ..
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Author:
Neville (
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- Comment from author about the poem: its good to be back .. I shall respond to all previous reviews as soon as my brain is back to where it belongs without the jet lag and sleep deprivation
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Fantastic work. Great use of the senses old friend.
................ Cheers Tom ..
Cooeee! Ahh, another poem about KP and I. I fancied bit of her, but got a mouthful of botox. lol.
this was not about KP or really about a sunflower either .. it was about .. nah I'm still very tired so don't want to bring on a swoon in you .. Neville
If it was about a trout, an old one, it would have been about KP. lol.
Was she the apricot or one of the sunflowers? I'm thinking Sunflower. This made me hungry for some peach pie.
Welcome back.
An excellent start for one weary from traveling. Loved it. - Phil A.
Bless you for visiting, making my day, being write and loads of other things besides .. I think you have a good eye but a gentleman neva tells .. Cheers again Phil. Neville
A fine poem Nelville.
Thank you Jez, much appreciated sir .. I hope you are well and with seasonal best to you and yours sir .. Neville
We are fine Neville just old and slow
I have trouble with peaches and apricots.....couldn't make it a plum or a cherry, could yer......?
A good sign your jetlag is almost
may I respectfully suggest a daily dose of Andrews Liver Salts for a few weeks and if that does not help, then I shall certainly consider your request Dave .. in the meantime, how are you with lychees .. Neville
Thumbs up for lychees!
Stay cool, Neville.... fergot not in Oz are yer.....
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Your surburban sunflower stimulates the senses. She must have been the apple of your eye. Tasty work.
Core thanks Cassie .. & then it dawned on him 💜 🙂 I hope you feel able to post here very soon .. Neville
Ha, love the apple pun. Hello Neville. Just passing through. Maybe I’ll get round to posting one or two. Hey that rhymes 🙂 💜🙂
Core thanks Cassie .. & then it dawned on him 💜 🙂 I hope you feel able to post here very soon .. Neville
Welcome home N. Okairi!
Hey arqios, I hardly recognised ya buddy .. Many thanks for helping to create a warm return to these much colder climes .. Bless you & seasonal best to you and yours .. Neville
Fine words Neville, how big a portion of her did you get?
Andy
You know better than to ask a gentleman .. go wash your mouth with a brandy and mince pie .. N 🙂
I would rather have Laphroaig and a mince pie Neville.
Andy
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