Going Against the Flow
Why stare at me
like that
my darling with
such ice cold
apprehension ..
A singular
detachment
if ever there was ..
Don’t dare
tell me that you
think you
were misread,
by any chance ..
How on earth
did we arrive here
like this ..
And while at it,
pray tell ..
Why have you
now deserted me
and no longer
love me ..
In spite of how
much water,
has now flowed
both clean
and so freely
beneath our bridge ..
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Author:
Neville (
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Emotive words Neville, may she flow back to you soon.
Andy
You are too kind and spoiling me again today Andy .. Thank you sir .. Neville
p.s. in this instance, I am glad there was no backflow, since I fear I may otherwise have been sucked under 🙂
This sounds suspiciously like another tale of KP and I. Did ya marry her sister? Has she got any?!
this is about a young woman I knew who developed quite serious problems after she had a baby (puerperal psychosis) and who not long afterwards hanged herself beneath south Bridge where we first met .. incidentally, it was the last place we both met also .. just in case you might be wondering, we had gone our separate ways about eighteen months before this tragedy occurred but she still haunts me .. Neville
Oh, sorry about that. Shall I delete the comment? I never get the meaning of some poems.
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Ice cold stares, going against the flow, and bridges,
When I first read these lines, I saw a dead woman in a river, but then I scrolled down further to find that you had given the game away.
Maybe she just wants to be remembered and that is why she still haunts you. Light a candle for her and speak fondly to her. Maybe then, she will leave you be Neville. An emotive write, sad with it too. Suicide, such a lonely, violent ending 🙁
There are those who can never be forgot no matter how much they hurt you, or indeed you may want to .. thanks for your understanding .. Neville
Never a truer word Neville.
I believe it went, "She's cold as ice!"
A good read Sir Nev, much enjoyed the emotional coaster.
Thanks for taking a peek & daring to take the ride .. Neville
Brilliant work.
Cheers TWC
I wondered what possessed her to leave, but then reading your comments answered that questioned. A disturbed young girl, sort of lost in this world. It was saddening to read. Your poem describes a parting of ways between two lovers, that one cannot understand, because it is illogical. The way you wove in the bridge is cleverly done. A most enjoyable read. - Phil A.
Thanks an awful lot Phil .. between just you n me, one of the things that help is the knowledge that she & I had said our goodbyes almost two years previously .. having shared that, it doesn't stop the but if's and why's creeping in from time to time .. Neville
There is always true intimacy in your poetry, even when forever bonded with a being detached from our world! I also love the metaphor of the bridge, even when it was part of your true story…
I am seriously grateful my dear friend .. thank you so much for visiting and your ever so kind comment .. Neville
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