Make me one to go


A mist of zest from a lemon pressed

now squeezed all juice released

a peel that has lost its zeal

what's least now fleeced

  • Author: sorenbarrett (Offline Offline)
  • Published: February 15th, 2024 02:52
  • Category: Unclassified
  • Views: 13
  • User favorite of this poem: Teddy.15.
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  • orchidee

    I must be briefer sometimes. Is it the soul of wit - brevity? From 'Hamlet'. Lots of Shakey's quotable quotes in that, but he also said some daft stuff, I think.

    • sorenbarrett

      Thanks Orchi brevity is only good if it means something. lol Thanks for the review my friend. I think that Shakey's where the term shaker comes from isn't it. Can't make a good drink without one.

    • Alan R

      The first line is very captivating

      • sorenbarrett

        Thank you for your read and your comment

      • Bella Shepard

        Such a potent sensory feel to this poem. As I read I can smell the lemon, taste its tartness and visualize the empty shell. Good things come in small packages, and here something wonderful!

        • sorenbarrett

          Thank you Bella your visit is most welcome and valued. I deeply appreciate your most kind comments. You are right about small packages and your infrequent poems become even more anticipated.

        • Teddy.15

          This reminds me of Limoncello a shot glass filled with southern lemons and it's just what the doctor ordered any time after dinner. 🤗

          • sorenbarrett

            Thank you Teddy so glad you enjoy the drink. I love Margaritas and Caipirinhas (almost the same but with cachaça instead of tequila) there is also an underlying meaning in the sourness of life that is squeezed out of a person leaving only a shell where even the rind is scraped.

            • Teddy.15

              This one works many ways but your intention is so powerful, I've been squeezed like a lemon in my life so I really appreciate the meaning and beyond. 🌹

            • Goldfinch60

              We may well be fleeced soren but all we have done is been moved to a better place in our lives.


              • sorenbarrett

                Thanks Andy I agree, I wouldn't want to go back.

              • Olaf Gatermann

                Witty. I like your kind of humour... O.

                • sorenbarrett

                  Thank you so much I appreciate your read and comment

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