A Critical Measure
A little of me was left behind when she suddenly left
Prompting A Genesis I guess, of both smiles and tears . Trying, Perhaps mistakenly ,a tactile desperate grasp to reach back, grab a little of each, and allay my building fears
Wishing to compute a relationship relativity to override this soul shaking negativity wondering if there was someway to conclude that our piles of infectious smiles combined to cancel, this current river of tears. With a wink I began to imagine a mystic scale buried deep in
a sea filled with waves of emotion touching each and all , with surging tides of resentment and contentment ,great success and lonely duress , our inspired climbs and insipid falls. Hark, grand waters break and grand Heralds call, Behold Grandest Scale of All
The magnificence now before our eyes , abruptly delivered a Shock and Awe surprise. That scale was barely noticed, rather all gathered, strained to hear hypnotic beauty of the Herald’s song . Life’s Meaning and pure essence melodically messaged through my ears
I no longer wished to count those smiles and no longer wished to weigh those tears. At once and sudden I did remember, importance lives not within all that wash away but rather it stays within our
love of life and our Joyous Spirit of Surrender
BobbyO
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Bobby O (
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- Comment from author about the poem: Sometimes I’ve been slow figuring out what is most important. Gladly, little by little , I’m getting better
- Category: Reflection
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This is amazing.I went back and read it again.There is so much in it.You are a true poet Bobby O i have always said that about you.Well done
Hi Bobby .. I swung by earlier as soon as I noticed you had posted and before my shower ..
Those opening three lines near had me reaching for the Kleenex .. so relatable and painful, felt like a knee in the groin .. and then it got better and with a feeling of relief, I was left with the residual dull ache with which we are clearly both familiar .. Yep, so good to see you friend .. 🎶🎵🎵🎶👍
I let some girl stall me cuz she was shitty , and then I tried to get back quicker but my mind was in a thicket and. Writing then presented itself as the energy we all know it is. And mostly I missed you ( no joke) I just did.
............................................ reciprocated 😎👍
Wow ! That means a lot. I got tingly. Too cool.
This holds a great deal within it. A deeply human experience that anyone old enough and sensitive enough can relate to. Personal and a call after loss. It rings with familiarity.
So you have a recent undesired relationship outcome? Two taps on my heart , my friend.
this is insanely good. i love the line
"The magnificence now before our eyes , abruptly delivered a Shock and Awe surprise."
and
and I like the way you flipped the poem around at the end, true masterpiece
Much appreciation thrown toward you.
this is insanely good. i love the line
"The magnificence now before our eyes , abruptly delivered a Shock and Awe surprise."
and
and I like the way you flipped the poem around at the end, true masterpiece
Brilliant work. You paint the scene well.
Your piece navigates the complexities of love and loss with introspection and acceptance. Through the imagery of a mystic scale buried within the sea of emotions, you capture the struggle to understand relationships. However, the revelation that true importance lies in embracing life's joy and surrendering to its essence is both profound and poignant. Well done!
Hmmm. , for the therapeutic part of this suggested exercise we might try to skip the AI you know
Beautiful write!
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