Ok, I got it.
Had to think real hard about
What I may have wanted.
A little spark to revive my heart
Sure, let's get on it.
Even starting to pull it to words
The emotions start to flow.
Turn that off quick!
That may be the cause of this blasted glow.
I get a little anxious
When I think that it might show.
"What could happen if it did?"
You never know!
I guess it would be nice to have
Someone with something to share.
Not of possessions, gossip talk
Or what did who where.
I'm talking of things considered
A bit more rare.
I'd like to know your nuances,
Proclivities and how you think.
What gets your motor going?
What brings you to the brink?
Share with me your cares and troubles
Worries, fears and all the rest.
Listening ever so intently
Letting you get it all off your chest.
Kiss away your troubles
And remind you, you did your best.
A friend for the end of the world.
No matter what.
Ups and downs, ins and outs
Always there.
Don't have to pretend or be too proud
Always cared.
Loved for all your faults.
And every hair.
Let's start there.
~I.S.~
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Author:
Introverted Sage (Pseudonym) (
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- Category: Love
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Comments5
Is that all logic ? Is there intertwined caution ? It’s might be the way you write, a declaration of an undying love and it might also be a bargain that represents a chance or a bargain that works against your goal. Allowing entry through a less restricted door is likely to bring a less committed partner. I used to negotiate for a living and with very few exceptions , to pander do you get a little piece because your too afraid of none
almost never works. This needs reassessment.
I'm confused on your feedback..
This is a piece from something longer that I wrote and was broken into a few different segments.
This 'part' is incomplete as it says 'let's start there'.
There is no allowance or bargain or entry. Except for the allowance of being fully transparent.
The poem is posed as if asked on the type of love wished to received but is written on the type of love given which in turn, would be accepted.
It's more of a fear-less love.
Without the need to hide. With no restrictions and without the need, want or desire to take advantage of another.
An unconditional love. A Love with no conditions.
Accepting anything less would certainly require reassessment.
Sadly many accept conditional love without a second thought.
I appreciate your time and comment!
So we are simpatico ! I’ve reread and now realize where I jumped off course. You did good !!
Thank you!
Magical
It seems when you give of yourself it's all or nothing
Yet you still seem a bit cautious to let it show
A brilliant write full of anxiety but also hope
Get that glow sage
You deserve it
More upbeat than usual
Just as high a standard
Thank you!!
Truly beautiful.
Thank you!!
Your poem beautifully captures the longing for deep connection and understanding in relationships. It portrays the journey from hesitation to openness with heartfelt sincerity, emphasizing the desire for genuine connection over superficial topics. It gracefully conveys the yearning for a meaningful connection with someone who embraces you entirely. Well done!
Thank you!!
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