Lying once asleep without thoughts of love
Romeo fell upon his own worst fate
Juliet tumbled into his arms never to be separated
it was love at first sight
it struck them both like a million lightning bolts
and so the Opera begins…
Juliet knew her love was forbidden
simply because her family wanted no ties
with that of Romeo’s.
two families who despised each other
I, the Poet believe “they were cursed”
Romeo and Juliet
ran away and married in secret
before she was to marry another
their love was too strong to surrender
even blood couldn’t separate them
the evening of the day they were wed
arrived alongside the darkest of clouds
a duel took place and a man was killed
Romeo had blood on his hands
having no choice but to leave at first light
or face the death penalty, he agreed to go
but little did he know
Juliet was already secretly planning
her escape to be with him
she was summoned to marry Paris
and she agreed knowing all the while
she would fake her death and return
to the arms of her Romeo
and so this Opera continues…
Juliet takes a sleeping potion
she is dead “so they thought”
as she lay in her casket
laid to rest “but never she will”
Romeo returned to her side
and on disbelief of his greatest love
sleeping for eternity without him
decides to kill himself
“thou shall not be alone”
hailed Romeo
his heart broken he drinks the poison
“gone forever”
only to be found by a sleepy yet alive Juliet
in the most tragic moment of her life
Juliet kisses Romeo
in hope she will also die from the poison
alas, it wasn’t to be
so she takes Romeo’s dagger
“O happy dagger”
she cries
plunging it into her chest
slumped then on
Romeo’s
lifeless body
whether they found each other
in paradise we shall never truly know
I can only hope that they did
because it doesn’t get more poetic than this.
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Author:
Teddy.15 (
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- Comment from author about the poem: Just my own adaption. 🌹
- Category: Love
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Dear Lady T ..
I imagine with ease, even the great Bard himself would give this version his thumbs up and verily .. 👍👍it gets mine as well .. I've been to Verona, but only once and stood looking up at the balcony there and just wondered ..
Here, have one of these, as well🌹
Your love of Italy is clear, must have been an emotional sight to at least see where the scene was written by the bard. Thank you my dear Nev, here's one right back to you 🌹
From all reports the end is roughly right - they did both cark it, didn't they Teddy.... As is blindingly obvious, my knowledge of this play is not great, but your version sounds very Shakespearian to me... and if perchance there maybe some variations, then this can only be a tribute to your creativity and versatility.
('Have I gone over the top here?' - 'Quite probably, question is will she swallow it?'...)
With much research I have tried to keep the correct version just written in my own words, I'd love to actually make my own entire version of course, you know me well. 🌹 Maybe Paris will come back from the dead and take away Romeo as his lover lol good night dear Dave.
'Night Teddy - Sweet dreams. (For me? lol)
In fair Verona we lay our scene... love this, Teddy. You nailed it. 🙂
Thank you dear Tom, such a magnificent tale is the one from the Bard, I had to do much research, nice to know.when my friends enjoy it. Thank you. 🌹
Although not much of a betting man, I'll bet my love for Sharon that Romeo and Juliet did join together in love's most sacred place and still live there today. Very well penned Teddy. ❤️🌹
I wouldn't want anything less for you dear A.P. hoping love really does last forever. 🌹 Thank you 💕
Personally speaking, I know love lasts forever, if one so wishes it to. 🌹
I love your version of one of my favorite plays. Each time I've seen it I keep hoping that somehow it will have a happier ending, but alas it is not to be. You've made it so easy and pleasurable to enjoy, Thank you dear Teddy!
Thank you so much dearest Bella. 🌹
I know that this is an ancient tale going back before Matteo Bandello's original tale that became a great cover by Shakespeare. Others before him covered it as well so I guess it was well known. It is a great love story with all that a love story needs, forbidden love being the greatest. It has a great twist at the end and is most tragic. However I believe love never dies and is only transformed so what ever you believe as far as afterlife, transformed existence, etc. they can not be kept apart. You have done a most marvelous job of condensing a long play or story into a short poem, brevity is the job of a poet. Well done.
Thank you dearest sorrenbarret, and I agree with your thoughts, I'd like to think true love indeed lasts forever. Such incredibly kind words and such a wonderful review as always. Thank you dear Sir. 🌹
Beautiful work Teddy. You are a poet.
Thank you dear Thomas. So very kind and encouraging 🌹
Superb words Teddy, showing just how powerful love can be.
Andy
https://youtu.be/QxidjMJK9f4?si=QHt346XtWQ5Pjdv7
My dearest Andy, your link is incredibly beautiful, and so is the song. Thank you something I've never seen before. 🌹
Your retelling of Romeo and Juliet's story is truly captivating. The depth of emotion you infuse into their tale is remarkable. Despite the obstacles posed by their feuding families, you portray their love as an unstoppable force, which is incredibly moving. As Shakespeare said, "The course of true love never did run smooth," and your narrative beautifully illustrates this sentiment. The imagery you use, such as the metaphor of "a million lightning bolts," vividly conveys the intensity of their connection. The drama in the narrative emphasizes its timeless allure. The climax, depicting Romeo and Juliet's tragic end, is handled with poignant detail and depth. The uncertainty surrounding their fate in the afterlife evokes a profound sense of longing and melancholy, yet there's a glimmer of hope that they might reunite beyond mortal constraints. Your retelling skillfully captures both the beauty and tragedy of this enduring love story from literature.
Thank you so very much, it's a rarety to have such a review so a huge thank you for your kindness and appreciation towards this write. 🌹 Thank you Cloie 🌹
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