A violet haze crowns the sky monarch lays down to die
A burial pyre is ignited in fire as darkness takes his place
Shadows of gossamer weigh down the eye
Faded memories leave their trace
Dawn’s breath a fog of night
Swirls around the breast of hills
And timber hairs stand in fright
As those of might their lust fulfills
The gray stone wall In shadows grows black
Breathe deep the dawn’s emerging light
Green the fields of Elysium, buried come back
Soon fade to gold, new life ignite
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Wonderful flow in the work. Nice!
Thank you so much John for your read and most kind words. They are appreciated.
I just blew all the lights in my house by saying wow. Utterly superb poetry sorrenbarret I have a feeling the fire means so much to you as you have written a lot lately, I can feel it. 🌹
Exactly!!!
Thanks, Teddy you make me blush. I appreciate your most kind words. They are always valued.
Wow, your poem really paints a picture! I love how you describe the sky changing and the way you connect day and night to life and death. You capture the cycle brilliantly. The rhymes flow nicely, and your words create strong images..Great write all around!
Thank you, Tristan for your review and for your most kind words, they are most appreciated and deeply valued
Your welcome!
Good write SB.
What I want to know now is - Does the No.7 bus go too Elysium? lol. Or it might be the No.10 bus. heehee.
Not sure but I heard it’s running late. Thank you, my friend for the read and the comment.
It'll be happening in the future - yes? Buses to Mars and back, etc? lol.
This has echos of, what, optimistic paganism? Your usual fine imagery. But "Elysium"? goes the opposite way.
Thank you, Dan for the review and assessment. Yes I often combine a collage ranging from paganism to various different religions and nature worship. I find them all evolutions of basically the same thing. The remarks are most appreciated and valued.
Wonderful words soren, that light will always be in your life.
Andy
Thank you, Andy for the read and most positive wish they are all appreciated.
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