I a drop, you a stream
both possessed by an ocean's dream
My way to fall
yours to crawl
back to origin's call
You a bee I a fox
you were deceived by my curly locks
Your way to thrive
mine to survive
nature intended you to return to the hive
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Author:
sorenbarrett (
Offline) - Published: December 5th, 2024 03:27
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Fabulous rhyme and subject we can never forget natures beauty when you are around, love your imagery, and your very clever poetry. 🌹
Thank you Teddy for your most generous support of my poems. Your words serve as great inspiration fueling creative fires.
A very enjoyable read, thank you Soren
I thank you very much for your comment and review. They are both appreciated.
You are very welcome
An interesting meeting of differing species, coated in humour and possibly more!
Thank you, my friend. I appreciate your read and comment. And you were right to perceive that it does go a bit deeper. We all return to our origin and place of being. Summer are meant to be together and others not we all have our differences.
My dog once ran away and eventually came running home side-by-side with a fox. No joke. The two made friends! LOL! She's also been stung by bees before. They did not make friends! 🤣 A wonderful poem, Soren. Enjoyed it thoroughly, my friend! ❤️🙏
Thank you, Tristan. I appreciate your comment. Yes different species. Do make friends at times and sometimes those work out and other times not. We are all meant to be what we are.
For sure...and not a bit different than that! You are most welcome, Soren!
Good write SB.
Thanks so much Orchi
Good write, Sorren.
Thank you so much Jerry I appreciate your read and comment
Superb work. The rhyme and meter is impeccable.
Thanks so much Thomas your words are most appreciated
Brilliant
Thank you Tony I appreciate it.
You're welcome
Awesome poem
short and sweet!! 👍
Great rhyme and flow,
to read a real treat!!!💯🤩
Best regards ✌️ peace Thad
Thank you so much, Thad your remarks are always valued.
Great flow, Soren.
Thank you so much your words mean a great deal
Good write
Thank you, Mason. I appreciate your review and kind words.
You manage to convey most of a message in ten lines that takes me five verses. This is more fine work.
Thank Your words, always are most encouraging and our greatly valued.
Fine words soren, we all return to where we were from.
Andy
Andy, I thank you very much for your review and most kind words again they truly are appreciated
I'm s big fan in rhyming poetry and you penned in flawlessly in this poem. Also put a smile on my face, thank you.
I'm s big fan in rhyming poetry and you penned in flawlessly in this poem. Also put a smile on my face, thank you.
Thank you so much for your read and most generous and kind comment it is much appreciated.
Oh wonderful!
Thank you so much
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